https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y6week18-waiting/ Guitar Noise Discussion Board en-US Thu, 04 Jun 2026 07:51:07 +0000 wpForo 60 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y6week18-waiting/#post-285338 Tue, 18 Mar 2008 23:49:23 +0000 yes, vic, it is indeed a child waiting for her brother to take her home (my brother had once promised to fetch me from kindergarden but forgot... i can't remember the incident myself, only from the countless re-tellings :wink: ). of course, me being away from home is a very fitting interpretation, although i didn't think of that in particular. for me it was just general loneliness and failure/incompetence. so you're reading this pretty much the way i do :lol: glad you enjoy it!
pearl, i did think of that criticism myself when i wrote down "decline".. (and i know that norah song :D ) but then again i really liked the word there and argued that children sometimes use such words, maybe a bit out of context or with the wrong collocation, after having heard adults use them.. and decline is maybe not the word that is usually related to a sunset. well, i'm rambling. sorry. your criticism is justified and it is meant to be rather a child's point of view. still taking the poetic licence of keeping it the way i have it :lol:

cheers,
straycat.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group straycat. https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y6week18-waiting/#post-285338 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y6week18-waiting/#post-283757 Thu, 06 Mar 2008 04:45:45 +0000
particularly this:
i can't tell the time
but i see the decline
of the sun

maybe it should be told from the point of view of an observer of the child...

There's a song by Norah Jones called Seven:

Spinning, laughing, dancing to
her favorite song
A little girl with nothing wrong
Is all alone

Eyes wide open
Always hoping for the sun
And she'll sing her song to anyone
that comes along

Fragile as a leaf in autumn
Just fallin' to the ground
Without a sound

Crooked little smile on her face
Tells a tale of grace
That's all her own

Spinning, laughing, dancing to her favorite song
A little girl with nothing wrong
And she's all alone]]> Sunday Songwriters Group pearlthekat https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y6week18-waiting/#post-283757 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y6week18-waiting/#post-283755 Thu, 06 Mar 2008 04:07:04 +0000
:D :D :D

Vic]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Vic Lewis VL https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y6week18-waiting/#post-283755 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y6week18-waiting/#post-30646 Wed, 05 Mar 2008 22:16:00 +0000
waiting

i can't tell the time
but i see the decline
of the sun

the swing and the slide
today they are mine
mine alone

and it took a while
but now i realize
you can only fly so high
when no one's pushing you

and it took a while
but now i realize
there are times when you
grow smaller rather than taller

and there are times
when you plug petals off daisies with a sigh

and there are times
when you stare at the dots sprawling over the sky

there are times
when you're just waiting
for your brother to come
and take you home.

cheers,
straycat.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group straycat. https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y6week18-waiting/#post-30646