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cheers,
straycat.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group straycat. https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y6week26-water-in-my-lungs/#post-291402 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y6week26-water-in-my-lungs/#post-291389 Sat, 03 May 2008 15:56:12 +0000 Sunday Songwriters Group KR2 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y6week26-water-in-my-lungs/#post-291389 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y6week26-water-in-my-lungs/#post-31543 Fri, 02 May 2008 20:12:01 +0000
water in my lungs

the trees sing when you're quiet
the birds people the sky
i am at ease
on the kerbside of April

until the most beautiful song
tricks my mind
my mind staggering backwards on crutches
and the notes fall like a cold, steady rain

i am dripping
amongst picnicking
saturday people
i am soaked
in a field
of tombstones
with my face down
and my hands out
for driftwood

well, i've been to this dead end before
on the keys of a typewriter
that you have left at my door
on the waves of a memory,
a vein poorly reconnected

so, i know the chalk on the wall
i know my way back
and am conscious on the pavement
in no time at all

but i
have
water in my lungs


and one of these days
the rain will puncture my sleep
and one of these days
i will wake with
a ghost drug across a country at my feet
and water in my lungs
i will cough up blood on
another torn-out page

and “God, it's weird”....

pfff.... dislike it a little now... too clumsy. well, anyhow: the trigger is "Abandoned" by Scott Matthew (wherein he sings "God it's weird") and somehow a little Bright Eyes sneaked in as well ("I drug your ghost across the country" and "a cold steady rain"...).
it probably needs a good cutting down and tightening. i don't have the patience right now :?

cheers,
straycat.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group straycat. https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y6week26-water-in-my-lungs/#post-31543