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Ernie]]> Sunday Songwriters Group stikman https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7-w11-tears-over-texas/#post-318794 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7-w11-tears-over-texas/#post-318744 Sat, 17 Jan 2009 03:08:12 +0000
I like where you're going with this - and I like that you're ready and willing to take advice, and maybe change a line that might seem good to you but doesn't work for others. The original draft's fine - the little tweaks and changes make it better. The one small criticism I've got? Yes, it is slightly monotonous - in the sense of not much change, musically speaking, between the verses and the chorus. I don't mean boring - the lyrics are strong enough to carry the song - just that it could do with some variation.

Lots of plus points, though - strong story line, the music does suit the mood admirably, and the fact that you got up at 2am ish to finish writing - ah, you're a born writer! Never leave a song overnight - "Oh, I'll remember it in the morning...." - is one of the golden rules of songwriting....always write it down!

This one's already looking like a keeper....looking forward to more. Oh, by the way, I don't know what software you're using to record - but if you get around to re-doing this, and I hope you do, you might like to think about overdubbing a second vocal line for the chorus for a little extra impact...it's easy enough to do with Audacity, the program I use. And kudos for singing and playing at the same time.....

Yep, definitely looking forward to reading and hearing more from you!

:D :D :D

Vic

(And keep that notebook by the bed!)]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Vic Lewis VL https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7-w11-tears-over-texas/#post-318744 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7-w11-tears-over-texas/#post-318716 Fri, 16 Jan 2009 17:50:33 +0000
James thanks for help with soundclick. I just was not looking hard enough. I thought the 2nd version was more solid. I liked getting the chorus off the front end and adding the four new lines to the chorus seemed to make it all a bit more cohesive. The only difference in the chord progressions is there is an Am in the chorus so the thing is very similar and it's all very Dminory. I'd like to switch the chords up somehow. Any suggestions? Hopefully as I go through the guitarnoise lessons and podcasts I'll learn some things about chord theory as well as tighten my guitar playing and singing. I love those podcasts from Mr Hodge.

This has been a good process for me. This it the first song that I have brought to any level of completion and recorded and I guess it's having an assignment that did it. I would not have written about this otherwise.

Alan I had some 4 o/c inspiration last night. I'd rather be sleeping but I've learned to write things down immediately because they are gone in five minutes.

Thanks again,

Ernie]]> Sunday Songwriters Group stikman https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7-w11-tears-over-texas/#post-318716 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7-w11-tears-over-texas/#post-318697 Fri, 16 Jan 2009 11:08:11 +0000 Sunday Songwriters Group contagiousjerm https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7-w11-tears-over-texas/#post-318697 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7-w11-tears-over-texas/#post-318680 Fri, 16 Jan 2009 06:02:47 +0000
The link worked...the mood seems to fit the words :D

Suggestion:

It sounds like the same chord pattern for the verse and chorus. Consider adding a bit more variety or contrast between the two sections.

Also, I think I would like to see your original lyrics back up on the post to do a comparision...for some reason, I'm remembering the original was a bit more solid than what you have now.

James]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jamestoffee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7-w11-tears-over-texas/#post-318680 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7-w11-tears-over-texas/#post-318678 Fri, 16 Jan 2009 05:46:51 +0000
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1. Sign up for a soundclick account
2. Follow their instructions on how to upload a song onto your Artist Page
3. Go to your Band Administration page
The first section says, "Your URL Main Page:"

For example:
Your URL Main page: http://www.soundclick.com/JamesSundaySongWritersGroup

4. Copy and paste this web address into your post in this forum when you post your lyrics. you can edit your original post to include the link.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jamestoffee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7-w11-tears-over-texas/#post-318677 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7-w11-tears-over-texas/#post-318675 Fri, 16 Jan 2009 05:09:44 +0000 Sunday Songwriters Group stikman https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7-w11-tears-over-texas/#post-318675 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7-w11-tears-over-texas/#post-318671 Fri, 16 Jan 2009 04:07:14 +0000 Sunday Songwriters Group KR2 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7-w11-tears-over-texas/#post-318671 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7-w11-tears-over-texas/#post-318669 Fri, 16 Jan 2009 03:55:35 +0000
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