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That seens to work real well. Music is in play. Just have to work a few things out . . . . . see if I can incorporate Vic's chord game . . . . or not. But I'm off the planet for a couple of days and will reappear mid week.

Neil]]> Sunday Songwriters Group chefie https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7-w49-so-obviously-not/#post-341255 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7-w49-so-obviously-not/#post-341252 Sun, 11 Oct 2009 05:04:44 +0000
Now the play is over, you took your final bow.
It was all an act for you. I can see that now.
You were good at acting and it was just a show.
Why it wasn't real for you is what I want to know.

or you can switch the first two lines and place them last . . . yeh, I like that better.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group KR2 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7-w49-so-obviously-not/#post-341252 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7-w49-so-obviously-not/#post-341149 Fri, 09 Oct 2009 15:12:11 +0000
This line is a bit twisted for rhyme's sake:

For thinking you loved me I was so naive

Maybe try-

I thought that you loved me; I was so naive]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jamestoffee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7-w49-so-obviously-not/#post-341149 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7-w49-so-obviously-not/#post-340977 Wed, 07 Oct 2009 08:31:47 +0000 ]]> Sunday Songwriters Group KR2 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7-w49-so-obviously-not/#post-340977 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7-w49-so-obviously-not/#post-340975 Wed, 07 Oct 2009 08:14:26 +0000
Neil]]> Sunday Songwriters Group chefie https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7-w49-so-obviously-not/#post-340975 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7-w49-so-obviously-not/#post-340971 Wed, 07 Oct 2009 07:38:44 +0000 It flows.
I had some thoughts on this verse,

You only had to smile to make me smile back
you only had to lead, to lead me off the track
you asked that I love you, then you turned away
your cruel masquerade, just another role you play

Not any better . . . just an alternative . . . keeping it in the past tense

You only had to smile to make me smile back
you only had to lead, and led me off the track
you asked that I love you, then you turned away
in your dance of deception, just a role you play

I hope this turns into a song.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group KR2 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7-w49-so-obviously-not/#post-340971 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7-w49-so-obviously-not/#post-37396 Wed, 07 Oct 2009 07:17:50 +0000
So Obviously Not - James Toffee

Verse by KR2

For thinking you loved me I was so naive
It didn't take much for you to pack up and leave
All the words you said and promises made
Was only a part of your cruel masquerade

Chorus by Chefie

You're so obviously not
so obviously not there
you're so obviously not
not one who seems to care

You're so obviously not
not anything that's real
what is it that you wanted
that made you want to steal.

2nd Chorus & Bridge by Chefie

You only had to smile to make me smile back
you only had to lead, to lead me off the track
you asked that I love you, then you turned away
your cruel masquerade, just another role you play

taking what you could never give back
never any doubt, never any tact
you took from my heart, you stole from my soul
it was always your plan, always your goal

You're so obviously not
so obviously not there
you're so obviously not
not one who seems to care

You're so obviously not
not anything that's real
what is it that you wanted
that made you want to steal.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group chefie https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7-w49-so-obviously-not/#post-37396