https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7-week-41-super-stitchup-dylan-barrett/ Guitar Noise Discussion Board en-US Thu, 04 Jun 2026 22:45:16 +0000 wpForo 60 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7-week-41-super-stitchup-dylan-barrett/#post-337948 Fri, 28 Aug 2009 13:57:23 +0000 lot, partly because it's the sort of thing I like to write myself! Thanks for reading a commenting - welcome!

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D 8)]]> Sunday Songwriters Group DylanBarrett https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7-week-41-super-stitchup-dylan-barrett/#post-337948 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7-week-41-super-stitchup-dylan-barrett/#post-337696 Mon, 24 Aug 2009 22:18:03 +0000 lot, partly because it's the sort of thing I like to write myself!

I like the internal rhymes of 'blur/transfer' and 'flying/lying' too. The telephone box line seems to lose the rhythm, though. "I use revolving doors or a telephone box'?

I think the buttons should be in the title. 'Sew My Buttons On'? Or just 'Buttons On'?]]> Sunday Songwriters Group klepsydra https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7-week-41-super-stitchup-dylan-barrett/#post-337696 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7-week-41-super-stitchup-dylan-barrett/#post-337666 Mon, 24 Aug 2009 12:55:14 +0000
Much appreciated.

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D 8)]]> Sunday Songwriters Group DylanBarrett https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7-week-41-super-stitchup-dylan-barrett/#post-337666 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7-week-41-super-stitchup-dylan-barrett/#post-337586 Sun, 23 Aug 2009 01:06:42 +0000
What you're doing, Dylan, is exactly that - writing yourself, coming up with comments on other people's songs, and generally thinking more about the whole songwriting process. You come up with some good songs - and even when you don't, you come up with some interesting twists. The point is, you're thinking about your songs rather than just jotting down rhyming couplets....you're thinking about story (beginning, middle and end) and development; you're thinking about varying your song structure from week to week; you're THINKING about your writing, and that's a good thing.

As for this week; I think you've got about 75-80% of a good song here. It's a bit different, it's very....Dylan Barrett, it's a bit quirky, it's a very good effort. For me, it just needs finishing....maybe re-think a couple of lines here and there. Maybe make more of the velcro connection....

Keep 'em coming - and above all else, keep on thinking like you do - in your own individual style - about the songs you write.

:D :D :D

Vic]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Vic Lewis VL https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7-week-41-super-stitchup-dylan-barrett/#post-337586 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7-week-41-super-stitchup-dylan-barrett/#post-337557 Sat, 22 Aug 2009 03:54:36 +0000 Thanks for the feedback. I thought, who get's the job of sewing his buttons on..or does he just buy replacements For encouragement's sake, I think your line of questioning and imagining the "what if's" is a great and an essential part of the songwriting process. :D Maybe I should focus (forgive the pun) on his x-ray vision - I think that could fit the bill quite nicely! This could be a nice angle :wink: I think you are doing what it takes to improve as a songwriter....Examining what works or doesn't work and not stopping at a road block but finding an alternative route.

Up up and away....indeed!

James]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jamestoffee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7-week-41-super-stitchup-dylan-barrett/#post-337557 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7-week-41-super-stitchup-dylan-barrett/#post-337516 Fri, 21 Aug 2009 18:54:17 +0000 I am interested in your reply. Ok...I think I've learned that humorous writing isn't for me.... I mean, I can write a song about someone standing on a rake - which, unless it's yourself - is humorous, but I'd use it as a metaphor rather than inciting humor.

I look at my song and it starts off as a pretty good rock tune, and at the time seemed like a good idea - thinking about that iconic shot of Superman tearing open his shirt to reveal the 'S' underneath and I thought, who get's the job of sewing his buttons on..or does he just buy replacements - anyways, there were lot's of alternatives (although velcro didn't cross my mind :roll: ).

I cringe when I look at the lyrics now, although some of the verses are pretty strong so maybe there's something that can be worked on and manipulated.

Maybe I should focus (forgive the pun) on his x-ray vision - I think that could fit the bill quite nicely!

Up up and away....

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D 8)]]> Sunday Songwriters Group DylanBarrett https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7-week-41-super-stitchup-dylan-barrett/#post-337516 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7-week-41-super-stitchup-dylan-barrett/#post-337437 Fri, 21 Aug 2009 01:37:24 +0000
Dylan,

I have written a post as an assumption before, saying even if we write a song we don't like or are just uncomfortable about, we still learn something new about songwriting......but let me pose it as a question to you. Did you learn anything new about what makes a song work or not work by writing this song?....if so, what did you learn?

I am interested in your reply.

James]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jamestoffee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7-week-41-super-stitchup-dylan-barrett/#post-337437 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7-week-41-super-stitchup-dylan-barrett/#post-337401 Thu, 20 Aug 2009 18:36:14 +0000
Is funny... :? When I'm writing something I can feel the sort of tune that goes with the song and the words fit and I can hear a singing style that suits the song in general, but after it's done and posted you sometimes think... yup, this doesn't really work - in fact - what did I post it for :oops:

This is the first one of those - I thought it worked - now I'm not sure. Maybe because it's a different style of writing for me and I don't feel comfortable with it. A very odd feeling is that!

I've just pulled it from the bin as the dumpster was pulling up. Wiped it down, removed the bottle tops and milk stains from the creases, and laid it quietly in a darkened drawer labeled 'alternative'...

Thanks.
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D 8)]]> Sunday Songwriters Group DylanBarrett https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7-week-41-super-stitchup-dylan-barrett/#post-337401 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7-week-41-super-stitchup-dylan-barrett/#post-337362 Thu, 20 Aug 2009 15:25:52 +0000 What makes me think you had some brew while composing this? I liked the humor in this . . . I just thought it took a pint to get it out of you . . . in lyrics.
You know, ply the muse with alcohol to make her more cooperative . . . and willing . . . :oops:]]> Sunday Songwriters Group KR2 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7-week-41-super-stitchup-dylan-barrett/#post-337362 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7-week-41-super-stitchup-dylan-barrett/#post-337346 Thu, 20 Aug 2009 14:04:35 +0000 Yes, that would do quite nice :D

>Ok, so it doesn't work - This has now gone in the bin -
Why do you say that?

>Let's move on to Les Paul -
up! up! and away!!! :lol:]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jamestoffee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7-week-41-super-stitchup-dylan-barrett/#post-337346