https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7w18-my-belle/ Guitar Noise Discussion Board en-US Fri, 05 Jun 2026 02:02:44 +0000 wpForo 60 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7w18-my-belle/#post-323044 Thu, 12 Mar 2009 10:21:34 +0000 tretched a bit musically and had a bit of a Beatles sound with a Dylan"ish" singing style. Yeah, the voice wasn't what I wanted, but I kind of rushed to get a recording - I am working with someone to make some Harrison like guitar leads and make parts of the song harmonized. Also, the length is very uncharacteristic of the Beatles. I'm probably going to trim it down to 2, at most 3, verses. Also, I considered using less titles and putting in more of my story. a touch on the long sideyeah, for a Beatles song it is
many syllables in vs. contrasted with few syllables in ch good idea... I'll see what I can do

jeremy]]> Sunday Songwriters Group contagiousjerm https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7w18-my-belle/#post-323044 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7w18-my-belle/#post-322969 Wed, 11 Mar 2009 14:26:24 +0000 I'm very impressed.

KR2]]> Sunday Songwriters Group KR2 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7w18-my-belle/#post-322969 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7w18-my-belle/#post-322968 Wed, 11 Mar 2009 14:22:33 +0000
I'm really stuck on this project. I wrote a song similar to yours using Beatles song titles, but just couldn't get it together - oops, there I go again... You've really gone for the bonus points eh?

Well done for trying it.

Rock on!
D 8)]]> Sunday Songwriters Group DylanBarrett https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7w18-my-belle/#post-322968 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7w18-my-belle/#post-322963 Wed, 11 Mar 2009 12:53:38 +0000
Good go at it! :D
It looks like you took a lot of love songs and made it into a break up song. I think you stretched a bit musically and had a bit of a Beatles sound with a Dylan"ish" singing style.

Suggestions:
Going back to the chorus each time made it feel a touch on the long side, but you are definitely working hard for the money getting all those words in....I checked 3:50...that's not too long....maybe cause it's so packed tight with lyrics it feels that way. Consider adding a bit more contrast between the verse and the chorus....many syllables in vs. contrasted with few syllables in ch.

I am still tryin' to catch a train of thought for this week....I think I can....I think I can....I think I can.... :lol:

James]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jamestoffee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7w18-my-belle/#post-322963 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7w18-my-belle/#post-35280 Wed, 11 Mar 2009 11:56:53 +0000
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I saw her standing there
My Sexy Sadie, lovely Rita, Polythene Pam
My Lucy in the Sky, my Honey Pie
Oh Darlin I'd been searchin' for my Belle
I need you, love me do,
I wanna be your man
I've just seen a face gotta get you into my life
All you need is love, and I love her
But help! this bird has flown

I say.. I feel fine
If I fell, not a second time
She came in through the bathroom window
But now she's leaving home
Her Majesty's brought me misery
She's so heavy, so I'll let it be

Maybe we can work it out
with a little help from my friends
Wait, do you want to know a secret?
Girls got a devil in her heart
Gotta get back, it isn't getting better
As if I needed someone
I'm a loser, I'll cry instead
I'm gonna sit right down and cry
sit right down and cry

chorus

I had a gift from me to you
every little thing
I worked so hard eight days a week
She said, she said you never give me your money
Honey don't, all this I, me, mine
I should have known better
won't be two of us when I'm sixty-four
You've got a ticket to ride, tell me why
when I get home I'm gonna lose that girl

chorus

Forgive me for this glass onion,
it all about the name unsaid
my golden slumbers dig a pony
because all my lovin' can't buy me love
Now I've got to carry that weight
But I've broken my baby's chains
Yesterday, the two of us,
but today here comes the sun
Hello, goodbye… All Together Now!!!

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