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Looks like you had a good go at getting Verse 1's underway.....Good Job!

James

PS Nice rhyme on: world and unfurled....maybe drop the "was"....then drop a "you" in the last line if you want for syllable counting

I've seen you living and loving and traveling the world
Through wars and depression your life unfurled
You've lost many loves including your best
She went on before you to show the way]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jamestoffee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7w47-verses/#post-339965 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7w47-verses/#post-339933 Mon, 21 Sep 2009 20:48:16 +0000 forgotten about.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group stikman https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7w47-verses/#post-339933 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7w47-verses/#post-339931 Mon, 21 Sep 2009 20:22:14 +0000
Buried deep in the attic sits an old sea chest
Through the years and the dust it's held all of my best
Old photos and jewelry and my dad's pocket knife
Things that draw memories that I can't throw away Funny . . . I just posted a link to "Puff the Magic Dragon" on the Mary Travers topic . . . so the tune was still in my mind.
And then I started reading the lyrics to your first song and it kind of matched up.

I'd switch around "Jewelry and old photos" though . . . it seems to read better.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group KR2 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7w47-verses/#post-339931 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7w47-verses/#post-37254 Mon, 21 Sep 2009 20:08:00 +0000
Buried deep in the attic sits an old sea chest
Through the years and the dust it's held all of my best
Jewelry and old photos and my dad's pocket knife
Things that draw memories that I can't throw away
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Forget About Me - chefie

We've been playing this game a long long time
I've been in and been out but I can't fall in line
You've put up with so much but the streaks on your face
Show the channels through which your tears have raced
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White Sheat Paper - Coolnama

I've been sitting here for hours just staring
The pen in my hand poised to write
I can't seem to string together the appropriate words
I'll be sitting here all night
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Over the Fence - jamestoffee

Shimmering swimming pools and patios of gold
The people in there are allowed to grow old
A place where women embellish their faces
And troubles only last for a day
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Tired Old Man - mpeeler3

I've seen you living and loving and traveling the world
Through wars and depression your life unfurled
You've lost many loves including your best
She went on before you to show the way
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Six Bottles - DylanBarrett

Six bottles sit before me like pillars in the dark
Each one is a wrong move I have made
I'm finding it hard to know where to start
Each bottle reminds me of you]]> Sunday Songwriters Group stikman https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7w47-verses/#post-37254