https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7wk-14-hermes-hunger/ Guitar Noise Discussion Board en-US Fri, 05 Jun 2026 07:05:58 +0000 wpForo 60 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7wk-14-hermes-hunger/paged/2/#post-320764 Sat, 07 Feb 2009 07:47:37 +0000 Vic Lewis VL wrote:
...for me there's just too much repetition, musically... I think you've already got the right musical backing - it just lacks variation.... for me, definitely need more variety in the music.Maybe more musical variety to allow for more length and listener patience. *Poof* :mrgreen: I streched the melody line over two verses....better?

Don't mind the background chords...I was strumming a bit to stay on key...not really thinking about the chord changes...thinking "it should just fall into place"...WRONG...but it's the best I can do for a quickie for now...

Thanks to all for the comments and listen. :D

James]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jamestoffee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7wk-14-hermes-hunger/paged/2/#post-320764 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7wk-14-hermes-hunger/#post-320672 Fri, 06 Feb 2009 11:06:06 +0000
Good points. You know this is kind of wierd responding by posting, when we are both online and we could just pick up the campus phone :lol: ...but you might be reading Kathy's lyrics and I don't want you to FREAK OUT :lol:

James]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jamestoffee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7wk-14-hermes-hunger/#post-320672 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7wk-14-hermes-hunger/#post-320669 Fri, 06 Feb 2009 10:49:32 +0000
jeremy]]> Sunday Songwriters Group contagiousjerm https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7wk-14-hermes-hunger/#post-320669 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7wk-14-hermes-hunger/#post-320607 Thu, 05 Feb 2009 18:12:33 +0000 Sunday Songwriters Group TRGuitar https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7wk-14-hermes-hunger/#post-320607 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7wk-14-hermes-hunger/#post-320563 Thu, 05 Feb 2009 05:29:39 +0000
Lot's of clever lines and it's even in three (or six-eight if you prefer)! I agree with John that there are some rough spots with all the syllables, but I suspect that this is one where every repeated performance will help smooth out the edges quite a bit.

Well done.

Peace]]> Sunday Songwriters Group David Hodge https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7wk-14-hermes-hunger/#post-320563 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7wk-14-hermes-hunger/#post-320499 Wed, 04 Feb 2009 06:19:11 +0000
Love listening to this though, it's my kind of genre.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group JoeHempel https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7wk-14-hermes-hunger/#post-320499 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7wk-14-hermes-hunger/#post-320492 Wed, 04 Feb 2009 05:03:23 +0000
Don't mind me I'm nutz. :lol:

Stik]]> Sunday Songwriters Group stikman https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7wk-14-hermes-hunger/#post-320492 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7wk-14-hermes-hunger/#post-320488 Wed, 04 Feb 2009 03:53:49 +0000 Thanks for the comments, and I agree what you are saying is very fair.....I have 3 ideas in mind to remedy the music.
#1 On the musical breaks, integrete noteable gtr licks or phrases from the 3 singers but with the classical/lute like style
#2 Extend the main melody line to fit over two verses at a time instead of one.
#3 apply some acapella choir techniques with 3 or 4 part harmonies.

#2 is the most "do"able at this point...#1, #3 would take a bit more time and research...but in all, the fouondation is basically in place.

Thanks again. :D

James]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jamestoffee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7wk-14-hermes-hunger/#post-320488 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7wk-14-hermes-hunger/#post-320485 Wed, 04 Feb 2009 02:42:57 +0000
I don't know if you've ever tried any open tunings - it strikes me this might work well in DADGAD, where you could introduce a little variation in the verse form. Then again, I think you've already got the right musical backing - it just lacks variation. You definitely deserve all the plaudits going for thinking outside the box, so to speak....
it sounds a bit too wordy at times, you are singing in almost a certain cadence then it switches up to fit the words in almost. I can see Joe's point there, but I wouldn't worry about it - I tend to stumble over phrasing, too, until I've played a new song quite a few times, and with only a week to work with, there really isn't too much time to rehearse, is there - especially if you're pleased with something you've written, and want to get it recorded ASAP.

On the whole, I think you can be pretty pleased with this one - but it does, for me, definitely need more variety in the music.

:D :D :D

Vic]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Vic Lewis VL https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7wk-14-hermes-hunger/#post-320485 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7wk-14-hermes-hunger/#post-320474 Tue, 03 Feb 2009 20:20:44 +0000
Ernie]]> Sunday Songwriters Group stikman https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7wk-14-hermes-hunger/#post-320474