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Thanks. I appreciate your feedback :D

James]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jamestoffee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7wk35-radio/paged/2/#post-333152 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7wk35-radio/#post-333151 Sat, 04 Jul 2009 14:03:36 +0000
Ticks all the boxes for me - good lyrics, nice intro, strong confident vocals, pleasant tune, finishes just fine.

Rock on!
D 8)]]> Sunday Songwriters Group DylanBarrett https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7wk35-radio/#post-333151 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7wk35-radio/#post-333113 Sat, 04 Jul 2009 05:10:43 +0000
James, I do like the way you take criticism onboard, and aren't afraid to commit to a rewrite if you're not sure about a line - and your critiques have been pretty spot on as well, throughout this year. I'm filing you under "can take it, as well as dish it out..."

IMO, the first draft wasn't bad at all - but thanks to suggestions from the SSG readers, you've managed to turn a lyric with potential into an interesting lyric. That's the whole point of this forum, innit!

I'll comment more fully in the AM (well - it might get to be PM - the Mrs wants to go shopping early tomorrow, ummm, today - Saturday - so's she can watch the Williamses fight it out in the ladies final at Wimbledon....!)

Looking good so far though.....

:D :D :D

vic]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Vic Lewis VL https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7wk35-radio/#post-333113 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7wk35-radio/#post-333031 Fri, 03 Jul 2009 16:12:38 +0000 some weird problem with the mp3 is making a strange sound every now and then, unless you added a cowbell or something Thanks for the listen and post. The recording is very low quality as I am using a low end hand held digital recorder that needs new batteries.

I am glad you like the chorus. Thanks for letting me know what's working for you.:D
I'm picturing myself in a car off the side of a highway just sitting and listening to the radio Sounds like the start of another song ready to go :wink:

James]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jamestoffee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7wk35-radio/#post-333031 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7wk35-radio/#post-333013 Fri, 03 Jul 2009 14:10:26 +0000
Yeh everyone's had their go so I guess I'll just say that I'm liking the chorus, it's really relaxing. I'm picturing myself in a car off the side of a highway just sitting and listening to the radio :D]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jaythejoker https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7wk35-radio/#post-333013 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7wk35-radio/#post-332978 Fri, 03 Jul 2009 03:09:16 +0000 Keeping my medical kit locked in it's cupboard until I pass all my exams and get a certificate and a stethoscope Ok....I am not sure where you are going with this one, but if we are on the same wave length....I would suggest taking TLC's advice and "Don't go chasing waterfalls"....I think you are saying the same thing but in "medical terms" :roll:

Thanks for the listen and post.

James]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jamestoffee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7wk35-radio/#post-332978 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7wk35-radio/#post-332964 Thu, 02 Jul 2009 22:09:25 +0000
I'm sure there's more than dancing going on there.... :wink:

Keeping my medical kit locked in it's cupboard until I pass all my exams and get a certificate and a stethoscope.

Rock on!
D 8)]]> Sunday Songwriters Group DylanBarrett https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7wk35-radio/#post-332964 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7wk35-radio/#post-332949 Thu, 02 Jul 2009 19:20:17 +0000 I'm going to suggest that you experiment in going down in note, instead of up, on the last note on some lines. Ken,

Thanks again for the listen and post...and the elaboration. :wink: I am off to bed for now, but I will take a fresh look at it again tomorrow.

James]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jamestoffee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7wk35-radio/#post-332949 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7wk35-radio/#post-332948 Thu, 02 Jul 2009 19:13:43 +0000 I never elaborated on why I like this song.
You used the word "woo" when you were responding to Noteboat.
That's what this song is all about . . .
offering, suggesting reasons, to the singee, to make a go of this night.
And you did it with a minimum of words and did it convincingly.
(you didn't mention plying her with alcohol . . . but we don't need to know all the details)
That's what I liked it so much . . . minimal . . . yet hits the point of the song so well.

As far as the melody,
I'm going to suggest that you experiment in going down in note, instead of up, on the last note on some lines.
Especially on the last note of the last line of the verses . . .
Going down finalizes the thought . . . in my mind anyway.
But again, that's just how I'd like to hear the melody go.

Exellent job, JT]]> Sunday Songwriters Group KR2 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7wk35-radio/#post-332948 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7wk35-radio/#post-332945 Thu, 02 Jul 2009 18:53:18 +0000
I like the revised version :D

Feedback?]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jamestoffee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y7wk35-radio/#post-332945