https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8-w43-guilty/ Guitar Noise Discussion Board en-US Thu, 04 Jun 2026 10:29:26 +0000 wpForo 60 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8-w43-guilty/#post-358366 Tue, 24 Aug 2010 17:21:35 +0000 When they ask me for my last words,
I'll speak about injustice,
And how how nobody heard,
I was poor and starving,
Homeless, sick and cold,
My sentence isn't so cruel,
I would never have grown old, It is nice imagery, and moody. I don't think I need to hear your crimes, because if it was bad enough for execution, we can guess. I say beautiful.

On a different note, I was listening to some Johnny Cash the other night, and the songs Joe Bean and Cocaine Blues stood out as on the same topic... he cracks me up.

Jeremy]]> Sunday Songwriters Group contagiousjerm https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8-w43-guilty/#post-358366 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8-w43-guilty/#post-358335 Mon, 23 Aug 2010 16:41:49 +0000
The music I actually had going through my head while I was writing the lyrics was Procol Harum's "Whiter Shade of Pale," which was itself "inspired" by a piece of classical music....was it "Air On A G String?" - it's been a long time since I've actually recorded anything, but if I get a chance later this week I'll try and record this. I've got some music together, which sounds vaguely similar to "WSOP" but hopefully different enough to avoid out-and-out plagiarism. (It's actually more reminiscent of the chorus of Mott's version of "All The Young Dudes"......)

:D :D :D

Vic]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Vic Lewis VL https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8-w43-guilty/#post-358335 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8-w43-guilty/#post-358332 Mon, 23 Aug 2010 15:23:59 +0000
I'd like to take a guess at the original song and say, "Hallowed Be Thy Name" Iron Maiden]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Daemontears https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8-w43-guilty/#post-358332 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8-w43-guilty/#post-358313 Sun, 22 Aug 2010 18:03:03 +0000
The verses flow well, but for a chorus, I think the phrase "somewhat ashen-faced" sounds a bit too literary and could do to be modified into something catchy or memorable. Descriptive verses and action-based choruses, that's a winning combination in my book.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group martin-6 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8-w43-guilty/#post-358313 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8-w43-guilty/#post-358304 Sun, 22 Aug 2010 15:59:02 +0000
Well no guess on the song....an MP3 might help :wink:

But I agree with Ken that this assignment seemed to trigger the story teller in you.....and that's a good thing :wink:

Thanks for sharing.

James]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jamestoffee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8-w43-guilty/#post-358304 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8-w43-guilty/#post-358301 Sun, 22 Aug 2010 14:55:06 +0000 Sunday Songwriters Group Scrybe https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8-w43-guilty/#post-358301 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8-w43-guilty/#post-358298 Sun, 22 Aug 2010 06:43:21 +0000 It's simplistic, lucid, good imagery, elicits emotion, tells a story and probably a thousand ways this could be incorporated into a song.

This gets my Seal of Approval
(for whatever that's worth)

]]> Sunday Songwriters Group KR2 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8-w43-guilty/#post-358298 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8-w43-guilty/#post-39803 Sun, 22 Aug 2010 04:23:03 +0000
Think 1900 or so, Victorian England, where a starving child could be sent to jail for stealing a loaf of bread.....or hanged for stealing a pig or a sheep....

Guilty

Well the gaoler turned the big brass key,
Inside the thick steel door,
Thin mattress on a steel frame,
For the next few days or more,
I'm feeling claustrophobic,
I need to be outside,
Rain or sunshine on my face,
No place here to hide,

But I've been judged and,
Found guilty of my crimes,
And somewhat ashen-faced,
Led away to do my time....

The turnkey passed this morning,
And turned his face away,
He couldn't look me in the eye,
He knows today's the day,
The executioner's here,
The gallows pole is built,
And soon it will be my turn,
Yes my blood will be spilt,

For I've been found guilty,
And sentenced for my crimes,
And now, somewhat ashen-faced,
Led away to end my time.

There's a lot I have to say,
When they ask me for my last words,
I'll speak about injustice,
And how how nobody heard,
I was poor and starving,
Homeless, sick and cold,
My sentence isn't so cruel,
I would never have grown old,

Yes I've been found guilty,
And my sentence is death,
And I'll curse the world I lived in,
With my dying breath.

Yes I am guilty,
Of being born in poverty,
And that's my only crime,
Tryin' to find a better life for me,

Tryin' to escape this slavery,
Tryin' to find a better way to be,
Tryin' to find a way to be free,
Tryin' to get off the streets,
Tryin' to find some food to eat,
Trying to find a different beat,

(Ad-lib along the same lines for a couple of hours or so...)

:D :D :D

Vic]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Vic Lewis VL https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8-w43-guilty/#post-39803