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Anyway, the main page is at http://www.soundclick.com/bands/default.cfm?bandID=225059 .....

:D :D :D

Vic]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Vic Lewis VL https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8-w8-solstice-day/paged/2/#post-370971 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8-w8-solstice-day/paged/2/#post-370962 Tue, 13 Dec 2011 22:04:23 +0000
It does have a Beatles quality, maybe more of a John Lennon quality. Very nice.

I couldn't figure out how to get to your main Soundclick page. I'd love to take a look at the lyrics. I'm assuming that they probably changed since you last posted them.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Hobson https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8-w8-solstice-day/paged/2/#post-370962 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8-w8-solstice-day/paged/2/#post-370875 Thu, 08 Dec 2011 18:37:54 +0000
Sounding good. I like the musical lick you have :D Whatever setting you have with a reverb or delay gives the production a "Beatles" quality from their psychedelic period.

Thanks for sharing :D

James]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jamestoffee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8-w8-solstice-day/paged/2/#post-370875 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8-w8-solstice-day/paged/2/#post-370849 Wed, 07 Dec 2011 17:03:21 +0000 The recording is rough, as you stated. Sounds like you are using a 12 string. Most of my recording is done in one take on a laptop with a built in mic. I hope to improve the equipment next time I record.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group John Sargent https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8-w8-solstice-day/paged/2/#post-370849 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8-w8-solstice-day/paged/2/#post-370847 Wed, 07 Dec 2011 06:05:55 +0000 http://www.soundclick.com/player/single_player.cfm?songid=11272525&q=hi&newref=1 - only had time for one quick take, and I've no idea what the sound quality's going to be like - it's been recorded on a 7-year-old laptop which is still running on Windows XP and is as slow as a tortoise who's stepped in a jar of treacle trying to climb a steep flight of stairs. Backwards. And blindfolded.

Opinions, as always, are very welcome.....

And I may have a little more time to re-record this tomorrow.....if I can borrow the daughter's new laptop, we might be getting somewhere.....

:D :D :D

Vic]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Vic Lewis VL https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8-w8-solstice-day/paged/2/#post-370847 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8-w8-solstice-day/paged/2/#post-345585 Sun, 03 Jan 2010 22:35:23 +0000 Glad to see that your muse has turned to a brighter side for a bit :wink:

This really is beautiful and cheering me up no end, while retaining a melancholy feel (which I always am a sucker for. and I love songs featuring the sea :) ) and not becoming sentimental anywhere. Well done!

As for the syllables/line lengths in some places, I was mainly wondering about the firstborn baby girl line, but as you mentioned it already, I think it's gonna work out :wink: Also I am very fond of the archaic language!

As to this line: Her father's eyes and colouring, her mother's face so fair, To me, it seems natural enough to keep "her father's" (instead of "my"); however, I was wondering if "colouring" and "fair" are not the same thing? Don't they both refer to the skin tone? I thought "colouring" felt a little awkward.. but that's just my personal, subjective opinion :wink: Or does "colouring" refer to the baby's hair? That'd be nice, then. :D
Just my 2 cents.

I can almost hear this and am very curious to see how it turns out (oh my, a mandolin! :D ), so keep perservering!!
The music is going to turn out the way you want it in the end, I'm sure :D

Thank you for sharing and good luck with the music!
Cheers,
straycat.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group straycat. https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8-w8-solstice-day/paged/2/#post-345585 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8-w8-solstice-day/#post-345331 Tue, 29 Dec 2009 23:07:28 +0000
The first was the line "oft times I thought I'd freeze" - I think you should make the freeze more of an antagonist - "struggling against the freeze" or something like that.. think pbee had the right idea in "face against the breeze", except freeze is stronger than breeze.
A year has passed since that bless'd day, I saw my child and wife,
I've never roamed the seas again, or gone back to that life,
On Solstice day this year of '83 was born a boy,
My life could not be more complete, nor more filled with joy. I think this could be reworked, especially the line "On Solstice day this year of '83 was born a boy," feels awkward to me, and also maybe pinning the song down to a particular year will lose some of the feeling that this song could be more timeless. The other thing is putting it into a more definite resolve
"I'll never roam the seas again, or go back to that life,
a year has passed since that blessed day, I saw my child and wife.
and this year, on solstice day, was born a baby boy
my life could not be more complete, nor more filled with joy."

contagiousjerm]]> Sunday Songwriters Group contagiousjerm https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8-w8-solstice-day/#post-345331 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8-w8-solstice-day/#post-345149 Thu, 24 Dec 2009 23:22:25 +0000 cheers mate - and merry xmas (comes early down here)

Paul]]> Sunday Songwriters Group pbee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8-w8-solstice-day/#post-345149 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8-w8-solstice-day/#post-345148 Thu, 24 Dec 2009 21:51:30 +0000
one of a true love . . . rejected . . .

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=k1KxthvX1Ms

a Bob Dylan song, BTW

Here's the lyrics (if anyone is interested)

Oh, I'm sailin' away my own true love,
I'm sailin' away in the morning.
Is there something I can send you from across the sea,
From the place that I'll be landing?

No, there's nothin' you can send me, my own true love,
There's nothin' I wish to be ownin'.
Just carry yourself back to me unspoiled,
From across that lonesome ocean.

Oh, but I just thought you might want something fine
Made of silver or of golden,
Either from the mountains of Madrid
Or from the coast of Barcelona.

Oh, but if I had the stars from the darkest night
And the diamonds from the deepest ocean,
I'd forsake them all for your sweet kiss,
For that's all I'm wishin' to be ownin'.

That I might be gone a long time
And it's only that I'm askin',
Is there something I can send you to remember me by,
To make your time more easy passin'.

Oh, how can, how can you ask me again,
It only brings me sorrow.
The same thing I would want today,
I would want again tomorrow.

I got a letter on a lonesome day,
It was from her ship a-sailin',
Saying I don't know when I'll be comin' back again,
It depends on how I'm a-feelin'.

Well, if you, my love, must think that-a-way,
I'm sure your mind is roamin'.
I'm sure your thoughts are not with me,
But with the country to where you're goin'.

So take heed, take heed of the western wind,
Take heed of the stormy weather.
And yes, there's something you can send back to me,
Spanish boots of Spanish leather.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group KR2 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8-w8-solstice-day/#post-345148 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8-w8-solstice-day/#post-345111 Thu, 24 Dec 2009 07:01:32 +0000
BTW, I'm guessing here that the reader will think "83? Hmm....definitely not 1983.....maybe 1883, but the language is more archaic/arcane than that - maybe 1773?" Like I said, I'm hoping for a REALLY old-fashioned feel to this one - at least a couple of centuries worth of old-fashioned! Some English folk bands did this really well back in the 60's and early 70's - I'm still trying to write songs that'll pique someone's interest, never mind trying to write a classic folk song at the first time of asking!

A secondary consideration is the length of the song - if I have to add an extra verse, maybe in the interests of clarification, it's going to be about 8 minutes long. I was hoping from the original draft to make it about 4.5 mins, maybe 5 mins tops - but with the instrumental linking pieces between verses, it's already running at over 6 mins, and I'm thinking that's a bit too long.

I have to admit, I may have been a little too ambitious with this one - reaching a little too far. BUT - if you don't set your sights a little higher, you're never going to get your feet off the ground....right?

I'm struggling more than a little with the music - but nothing worthwhile ever came easily, did it? So I'll keep struggling till I get the music I want.....it's a hard life, and I don't HAVE to do this for a living! I will persist, and I WILL get it right in the end - one way or another!

Back to the drawing board - and the guitar. I was going to have an early night - and it's now 4am!!!!!

:D :D :D

Vic]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Vic Lewis VL https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8-w8-solstice-day/#post-345111