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cheers,
straycat.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group straycat. https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8-wk-20-nobody-knows/#post-350133 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8-wk-20-nobody-knows/#post-349736 Sun, 21 Mar 2010 03:21:06 +0000
Nice one, Jay!

:D :D :D

Vic]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Vic Lewis VL https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8-wk-20-nobody-knows/#post-349736 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8-wk-20-nobody-knows/#post-349668 Fri, 19 Mar 2010 14:40:57 +0000
"When the bullet shoots"
Technically, you might want to rework this line as car races don't typically start with a pistol shot/gun like a runners' race

Each driver then lines up (or stages) at the starting line. Informal drag races can be started by any means, including flag-waving and arm-dropping. These methods are more likely to be seen in an un-professional setting, being most popular with illegal street racing. Professional drag races are started electronically, with a series of vertically-arranged lights known as a "Christmas tree" or just "tree". A "Christmas tree" consists of a column of lights for each driver/lane. In each column, the top two lights are small amber lights connected to light beams on the track, which when broken by the vehicle's front tire(s) indicate that the driver has pre-staged (approximately 7 inches (180 mm) from the starting line) and then staged (at the starting line).

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Drag_racing

another suggestion:

When the walls are cracked
And the bottles breaking (Oh)
'CAUSE you ask her out
but she's already taken]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jamestoffee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8-wk-20-nobody-knows/#post-349668 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8-wk-20-nobody-knows/#post-349664 Fri, 19 Mar 2010 13:48:54 +0000
I think the end is better now thanks to your suggestions.
Thanks for the linking tip too ;)]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jaythejoker https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8-wk-20-nobody-knows/#post-349664 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8-wk-20-nobody-knows/#post-349643 Thu, 18 Mar 2010 22:17:05 +0000 Nice structure to this song I really like the parallel stories.
I think you've started off well but for me, I think the song would benefit from a different closure. Don't tell me that
that's just how it goes
I've got a theory that
Nobody knows

Don't tell me that
that's just how it goes
I've got a theory that
Nobody knows

Nobody knows
Nobody knows I'm really not sure what this means, maybe you could expand on the emotions that are being paralleled here like the adrenalin rush when she asks you out being similar to the racing. Like James says something to tie the two together.
Just my opinion of course the song still works as it is, good stuff.

Cheers
Paul]]> Sunday Songwriters Group pbee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8-wk-20-nobody-knows/#post-349643 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8-wk-20-nobody-knows/#post-349637 Thu, 18 Mar 2010 18:43:55 +0000
Good start :D I like the set ups....don't get the girl.....get the girl. I don't know why, but on the read through, I kept hearing that Bo Diddley riff like in "Who Do You Love?"

Suggestion:
It was a bit of a jolt going between the first section to the second. Consider clarifying a tie-in. For example, set up that it's one guy and he's a street racer from the beginning of the song....but it's interesting that you wrote in second person addressing the listener as "you"....I think the "you" adds a nice dimension to the lyrics.

Thanks for sharing.

James]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jamestoffee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8-wk-20-nobody-knows/#post-349637 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8-wk-20-nobody-knows/#post-38734 Thu, 18 Mar 2010 15:30:44 +0000
Oh, I also did lyrics first when I usually do music first :)

When you're driving home
and the sun is sinking (Oh)
When there's nobody home
and it's got you thinking

When the walls are cracked
And the bottles breaking (Oh)
When you ask her out
but she's already taken

Don't tell me that
that's just how it goes
I've got a theory that
Nobody knows

When the track is long
And the wheels are turning
When she walks right by
And your heart is churning

When that other guy
Makes a final blunder
It's your second try
To race on after

Don't tell me that
that's just how it goes
I've got a theory that
Nobody knows

When the bullet shoots
And the cars are racing
When she steps outside
And the boys go chasing

When the race is done
And you've lost your thunder
When she walks right up
And she asks your number

Don't tell me that
that's just how it goes
I've got a theory that
Nobody knows

Just tell me that
She's not on her own
She's only with me and
Everyone knows

Everyone knows
Everyone knows]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jaythejoker https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8-wk-20-nobody-knows/#post-38734