https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8w40-god-still-moves-on-the-water/ Guitar Noise Discussion Board en-US Thu, 04 Jun 2026 21:16:10 +0000 wpForo 60 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8w40-god-still-moves-on-the-water/#post-358284 Sat, 21 Aug 2010 17:32:02 +0000
Thanks for giving this one another look. :D

Kudos to you for going the extra search on the Tom Sawyer lyrics :wink:

Thanks again for the feedback.

James]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jamestoffee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8w40-god-still-moves-on-the-water/#post-358284 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8w40-god-still-moves-on-the-water/#post-358282 Sat, 21 Aug 2010 17:05:12 +0000 Needs to be said more often.
I won't pontificate . . .

Like Jerm, I like the new version . . . and would like it without the voice affects also.

I had to read the lyrics to Rush's Tom Sawyer to see how it relates.
Although I don't care for Rush, the lyrics have some clever lines.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group KR2 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8w40-god-still-moves-on-the-water/#post-358282 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8w40-god-still-moves-on-the-water/#post-358260 Sat, 21 Aug 2010 05:55:14 +0000
Good suggestions on both phrases. Thanks for the feedback :D

James

***POOF Phrases- rephrased*** :mrgreen:]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jamestoffee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8w40-god-still-moves-on-the-water/#post-358260 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8w40-god-still-moves-on-the-water/#post-358259 Sat, 21 Aug 2010 05:49:09 +0000
“Technology umbrellas the modern man” - start singing this line early, so that “technology” immediately follows plan. I think your only problem there was the slight rest (maybe you needed to catch your breath, so it's time for some rock star conditioning :-)


This line just one extra syllable, I suggest cutting as either:
"The guard of his heart fell ‘sleep on patrol" or "The guard of his heart, asleep on patrol"

Hope it helps – like the slide. I do like the vocal effects, but I think I'd like it without too.

Jeremy]]> Sunday Songwriters Group contagiousjerm https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8w40-god-still-moves-on-the-water/#post-358259 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8w40-god-still-moves-on-the-water/#post-358028 Sat, 14 Aug 2010 15:26:16 +0000
Thanks for the listen and feedback :D

James]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jamestoffee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8w40-god-still-moves-on-the-water/#post-358028 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8w40-god-still-moves-on-the-water/#post-358027 Sat, 14 Aug 2010 15:24:45 +0000
I like the way you worked the Blind Willie riff.

Love the line:

Til an iceberg struck his Titanic soul

Good Job

John]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Celt https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8w40-god-still-moves-on-the-water/#post-358027 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8w40-god-still-moves-on-the-water/#post-358024 Sat, 14 Aug 2010 09:19:08 +0000
While I agree the lyrics need trimming down...the songwriter in me was working, working, working on it not getting anywhere :evil: ....so the mixer in me said... :P "Hey, why don't you v-vocal the snot out of vocals"....so I gave in and messed around with the v-vocal :roll:

Feedback?

James]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jamestoffee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8w40-god-still-moves-on-the-water/#post-358024 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8w40-god-still-moves-on-the-water/#post-358017 Sat, 14 Aug 2010 03:48:53 +0000 Wish I could play the guitar as well . . . Too bad you don't live in Miami . . . I'd be bugging you for lessons. :P If I lived in Miami, I have a feeling I'd have to give you and a lot of other people guitar lessons to supplement an ESL teacher's salary :lol:
first two verses have too many syllables in most of the lines. Agreed. I'll see what can be trimmed down and phrased better.

Hey Scrybe,

Thanks for the reference. I agree that Jonny Lang has the right vocal and guitar style to do this justice :wink:

Thanks again for the feedback. :D

James]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jamestoffee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8w40-god-still-moves-on-the-water/#post-358017 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8w40-god-still-moves-on-the-water/#post-358002 Fri, 13 Aug 2010 21:54:26 +0000 Sunday Songwriters Group Scrybe https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8w40-god-still-moves-on-the-water/#post-358002 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8w40-god-still-moves-on-the-water/#post-358001 Fri, 13 Aug 2010 20:33:14 +0000 Like the talking part.
The only thing I didn't like was that the first two verses have too many syllables in most of the lines.
And when you try to squeeze them in it sounds forced and uncomfortable.

Wish I could play the guitar as well . . . Too bad you don't live in Miami . . . I'd be bugging you for lessons.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group KR2 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8w40-god-still-moves-on-the-water/#post-358001