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Great to see you posting again. :D Thanks for the feedback and suggestions. I see what you mean about poetic vs. straightforward lyrics. I guess that's where having an intended purpose and audience comes in to play in helping make those decisions. I agree too about the article missing, but when it's in there, it seemed to not put the emphasis on the word Babe....which means it probably needs to be reworked at some point musically to make it flow better lyrically. Thanks for the the feedback. I hope you and yours have a great 2010 stateside. :D


Hi Ken,

Thanks for the listen and smiley. All the best in the year to come! :D

James]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jamestoffee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8w8-smiles/#post-345554 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8w8-smiles/#post-345383 Wed, 30 Dec 2009 19:17:10 +0000 ]]> Sunday Songwriters Group KR2 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8w8-smiles/#post-345383 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8w8-smiles/#post-345329 Tue, 29 Dec 2009 22:55:47 +0000
A listening ear in a city (grown) colder
or
A listening ear in a city (now) colder

And I think the last line needs an article: the babe in the manger?

Jeremy]]> Sunday Songwriters Group contagiousjerm https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8w8-smiles/#post-345329 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8w8-smiles/#post-344967 Tue, 22 Dec 2009 10:26:38 +0000 it didn't quite work for me although I knew what you meant. How about, "A listening ear as nights grow colder"]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jamestoffee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8w8-smiles/#post-344967 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8w8-smiles/#post-344964 Tue, 22 Dec 2009 08:36:37 +0000 definitely fits the assignment my only issue was with this phrase A listening ear in a city colder it didn't quite work for me although I knew what you meant.
Thanks for sharing

Paul]]> Sunday Songwriters Group pbee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8w8-smiles/#post-344964 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8w8-smiles/#post-38068 Mon, 21 Dec 2009 21:13:32 +0000
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Cold dreary streets; muddy shoe laces
The flurry and rush hide their tear-stained faces
The warmth of your smile can brighten a room
Like a bouquet of roses in full bloom

Chorus
Your smile is a gift to many forlorn
Like brightly wrapped presents on Christmas morn
The joy of giving will bring good cheer
Smiles for sharing each day of the year
Smiles for sharing each day of the year

The touch of a hand not a brush of a shoulder
A listening ear as nights grow colder......................
Smile as your path crosses those on the road
The spirit of goodwill lightens their load

chorus

Hug an old friend; give a kiss on the cheek
Like snowflakes and moments; each is unique
Smiles given to loved ones and strangers
Are heavenly blessings like babe in the manger

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