https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8w8-sol-invictus/ Guitar Noise Discussion Board en-US Thu, 04 Jun 2026 22:41:22 +0000 wpForo 60 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8w8-sol-invictus/#post-345154 Fri, 25 Dec 2009 06:21:56 +0000 Sunday Songwriters Group GrungeSunset https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8w8-sol-invictus/#post-345154 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8w8-sol-invictus/#post-345009 Tue, 22 Dec 2009 20:27:56 +0000 That's what it needs . . . a chant.
That will give it the feeling of a ritual . . . a rite of the season.

Something like,

Oh glorious sun
The bringer of our light
To you we offer gratitude
For vanquishing the night

or, if there is going to be an animal sacrifice,

Oh glorious sun
The bringer of our light
To you we give this sacrifice
For vanquishing the night
]]> Sunday Songwriters Group KR2 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8w8-sol-invictus/#post-345009 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8w8-sol-invictus/#post-344958 Tue, 22 Dec 2009 05:26:49 +0000 I get the feeling that the chorus's are to be chanted which also fits with James' idea about a congregation or group. The verses then lend themselves to a solo voice accompanied by an acoustic guitar maybe. Given that, I think verse 2 would benefit from the same structure as verse 1 i.e. two parts of three lines, and for my money verse two could be a little more hard hitting with maybe some more allusions to its spirituality like the following 2 lines.We worship the sun
Its life never ending. This song has great potential, well done
Cheers
Paul]]> Sunday Songwriters Group pbee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8w8-sol-invictus/#post-344958 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8w8-sol-invictus/#post-344945 Mon, 21 Dec 2009 21:22:35 +0000
Good start :D
Looks pretty straightforward and focused on one idea of praise/worship. It looks like it could be a group/congregational song during an opening ceremony as it comes across less personal and more stating this is how it is....and that's not a bad thing :wink:

What kind of music did you have in mind?

James]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jamestoffee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8w8-sol-invictus/#post-344945 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8w8-sol-invictus/#post-344911 Mon, 21 Dec 2009 11:54:27 +0000 I want more pagan stuff in it though . . .
maybe a goat sacrifice . . .
or dancing around . . . in their skin . . .
some kind of ritual . . .
maybe paint their faces so they look like Mel Gibson in Braveheart . . .
You know . . . that pagan stuff.

But kidding aside, when reading . . . as far as the meter goes . . .
I was wondering if the second line in the first verse is too short.

Instead of

And gives us life.
maybe
And brings us all hope.

Sol invictus]]> Sunday Songwriters Group KR2 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8w8-sol-invictus/#post-344911 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8w8-sol-invictus/#post-38065 Mon, 21 Dec 2009 05:01:30 +0000



The sun shines it's light
And gives us life.
It shines for the faithful
And for the righteous.
It is the supreme astral body
And Sun of Justice.
Sol Invictus.

The dawn is breaking
And light shines on the empire.
We celebrate and the games begin.

We honor Sol during the solstice.
When its days start to get longer.
And its rays start to get stronger

The sun shines it's light
And gives us life.
It shines for the faithful
And for the righteous.
It is the supreme astral body
And Sun of Justice.
Sol Invictus.

We have our festival
When we see the night ending.
We worship the sun
Its life never ending.

The sun shines it's light
And gives us life.
It shines for the faithful
And for the righteous.
It is the supreme astral body
And Sun of Justice.
Sol Invictus

Sol Invictus.
Sol Invictus.
Sol Invictus.
Sol Invictus.....]]> Sunday Songwriters Group GrungeSunset https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8w8-sol-invictus/#post-38065