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another action verb? that's a great idea, thanks James! think think think... :P
and, hm, yes, maybe it's not exactly a song for the 3- to 4-year-olds.. .. perhaps the 5- to 6es?

ah, my brain seems to have shut down for today. will have anothe rlook later, but thanks for the suggestions and comments!

cheers,
straycat.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group straycat. https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8week17-week-dance/#post-349993 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8week17-week-dance/#post-349731 Sun, 21 Mar 2010 02:05:09 +0000
Just joking, Anne!....there is a nice flow to this, I can visualise it being sung over a simplistic, repetitive melodic theme.

:D :D :D

Vic]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Vic Lewis VL https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8week17-week-dance/#post-349731 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8week17-week-dance/#post-349456 Mon, 15 Mar 2010 06:17:06 +0000
Looks like fun :D I like "For here comes a broad grin on pancake legs:"

Suggestion: All the parts involve physical action except Tuesday. "On Tuesday, we watch the leaves sprout" Consider replacing this line with another action verb and you'd have a song I'm sure kids would love to get up and dance to.

Also you could create a character as the hook or chorus:

Here comes Mr. Chronographer; Let's all step in time
24 hours makes a day till he crosses the Prime Meridian Line

Thanks for sharing.

James]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jamestoffee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8week17-week-dance/#post-349456 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8week17-week-dance/#post-38696 Sun, 14 Mar 2010 18:37:58 +0000
Week Dance

On Monday, we spin with our arms out
On Tuesday, we watch the leaves sprout
On Wednesday, we paint the pavement and make up new plans
For we have reached the middle of the week
We might purr like a cat all Thursday and howl like a wolf all Friday, but now hold it,
For here comes a broad grin on pancake legs: it's Saturday, it's the beginning of the weekend
We can sail to Sweden or find that treasure map again
And, while we tell our adventures to anyone who'll listen, tree trunk, wardrobe or parent,
We hope that the sun won't sleep in on her day,
So we can dance out and play before even the birds wake
Up
And if the moon still has chores to do at his aunt's place
He won't see us skipping on our beds all Sunday
Night
And if he should see and turn grumpy, we'll just say it's our week dance
You have to do some skipping before one week ends and the next one begins

Monday, Tuesday, Wednesday
We have reached the middle of the week
Thursday, Friday, hold it,
Here comes the weekend, Saturday, Sunday
And then it begins again

Confession#1: I found it frightfully difficult to come up with a topic (didn't want to do the names of the seasons/months/colurs of the rainbow thing.. thought about geography and behaviour and... ah.. feltlike this was over my, as well as teh supposed audience's heads, plus, I was feeling pretty uninspired so I settled for week days... )
Confession#2: I know this is a bit too wordy in places, and too clumsy.. and the leaves sprouting is plain cheesy..(but my original ling was just too long-winded)..any suggestions for straightening up are very welcome! As are any other comments :-)

Cheers,
straycat.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group straycat. https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y8week17-week-dance/#post-38696