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This is picky but consider leaving the word "It's" off of the first line on the second verse. It's (ha!) not necessary and "Seven hours till Sunday..." will roll out better. In fact "so" and "now" could be left out off the last verses too. "Yo" and "yeah" kind of gives it a little personality though and could be emphasized like you are really calling out.

The first verses indicate 1st person and then later there is the word "you". It would be good to stick with one perspective throughout.

Nice tune.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group stikman https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y9w1-one-hundred-dollars-mp3/#post-360463 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y9w1-one-hundred-dollars-mp3/#post-360457 Wed, 03 Nov 2010 00:44:02 +0000
Like the MP3 and James' suggestion about making the
dollar amounts add up in the first verse.
In the second verse, I appreciate listing out the debts owed, but if someone is thinking along these lines to settle his debts, I have a hard time believing that debts to the sister or (especially) the State would be high on the list. I actually like the part about 200 for the State but agree the sister would not be high on my list.

Maybe bookie or if you want to play off the "getting high" in the first verse dealer.


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John]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Celt https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y9w1-one-hundred-dollars-mp3/#post-360457 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y9w1-one-hundred-dollars-mp3/#post-360452 Tue, 02 Nov 2010 17:42:17 +0000
I'm with James on the addition, but I think you should use it to keep the money needed / owed spiraling upward. It's kind of hinted at with the use of the word "almost" at the end of the first verse, but you could hammer it home like this:

One hundred dollars would be a good starting point
Yeah one hundred dollars would be a good starting point
30 bucks for liquor, 40 for a ride, 50 for the motel (that's including getting high)
I guess two hundred dollars would be a good starting point

You could use this upward spiral in the last verse as well:

One hundred dollars would get you off the floor
And two hundred dollars would get you out the door
50 saves a finger, 20 saves a toe, if you got a couple hundred then I'll let you go
Hey for four hundred dollars I might not come back no more

In the second verse, I appreciate listing out the debts owed, but if someone is thinking along these lines to settle his debts, I have a hard time believing that debts to the sister or (especially) the State would be high on the list. Just a thought.

Really liked the MP3. You've an appropriately low menacing growl. Very cool.

Looking forward to more.

Peace]]> Sunday Songwriters Group David Hodge https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y9w1-one-hundred-dollars-mp3/#post-360452 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y9w1-one-hundred-dollars-mp3/#post-360448 Tue, 02 Nov 2010 17:30:13 +0000
I like the vibe and delivery. I like the details in spelling out the money amounts. :D

Suggestions
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V1 seems to lack the detail shine like the other verses.
"One hundred dollars would be a good starting point"
Maybe something like
One hundred dollars for a good time Friday night
One hundred dollars and I'll be ready to fly (setup for meaning of getting high in line 3)
2 30 bucks for liquor, 40 for a ride, 50 for the motel (that's including getting high) This sums up to $120 Consider making it total $100
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Consider having V2 sum up to $100 to fit with the title and other verses
3 I'm interested to hear your thoughts on how I could make the story tighter or more succinct. seven hours till Sunday; got my debts to pay
That's about all I could see about trimming down.
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would settle all that you done took
how about
would get your name off the book(s)

One hundred dollars would settle all that you done took
Yeah one hundred dollars would settle all that you done took
50 saves a finger, 20 saves a toe, if you got a hundred then I'll let you go
Yeah one hundred dollars would get your name off the book(s)

Thanks for sharing mp3 was a nice + :wink:

James]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jamestoffee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y9w1-one-hundred-dollars-mp3/#post-360448 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y9w1-one-hundred-dollars-mp3/#post-40170 Tue, 02 Nov 2010 17:00:41 +0000 I even found the time to hack out a rare recording which you can hopefully access here:
http://dl.dropbox.com/u/2121584/ssg/index.html

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One Hundred Dollars

One hundred dollars would be a good starting point
Yeah one hundred dollars would be a good starting point
30 bucks for liquor, 40 for a ride, 50 for the motel (that's including getting high)
Yeah one hundred dollars would almost be a starting point

It's seven hours till Sunday and I got my debts to pay
Yeah seven hours till Sunday and I got my debts to pay
50 bucks to Marcus, 65 to Nate, 80 to my sister and 200 to the state
Yeah it's seven hours till Sunday and I got my debts to pay



So empty out your pockets cos tonight's collecting time
Yo empty out your pockets, tonight's collecting time
I've got two steel barrels, three dozen shells, you're on my list and we're both going to hell
Now empty out your pockets, before those church bells chime

One hundred dollars would get you off the hook
Yeah one hundred dollars would get you off the hook
50 saves a finger, 20 saves a toe, if you got a hundred then I'll let you go
Yeah one hundred dollars would settle all that you done took]]> Sunday Songwriters Group martin-6 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y9w1-one-hundred-dollars-mp3/#post-40170