https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y9w8-summer/ Guitar Noise Discussion Board en-US Thu, 04 Jun 2026 22:41:13 +0000 wpForo 60 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y9w8-summer/#post-362081 Tue, 28 Dec 2010 04:13:48 +0000 Sunday Songwriters Group jamestoffee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y9w8-summer/#post-362081 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y9w8-summer/#post-362073 Tue, 28 Dec 2010 00:57:27 +0000
Jim]]> Sunday Songwriters Group geoo https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y9w8-summer/#post-362073 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y9w8-summer/#post-361992 Thu, 23 Dec 2010 13:54:35 +0000
Thanks for the well wishes. We had a nice trip :D

Hi MrEWorm and Ernie,

Thanks for the listen and encouraging words.
I like how summer is glad to show up but insulted when asked to leave. I went back to this poem I had come across before as the framework of the story:

In August, Summer demands our attention.
When the evening comes, she refuses to leave.
Being a visitor, she once again wears out her welcome.
By September, we are delirious, thinking that she'll never leave,
But then, she slams the door on her way out.

In October I'll miss her.

http://www.writing.com/main/view_item/item_id/1009002-Summer
Can't help but wonder whether or not the discussion of "eternal" and "being mortal" aren't a bit out of place. ****POOF Changes made :mrgreen: ******

We wake up some time in the morning
Maybe mid-day afternoon
The dreams we dream are worth exploring
Eating sunsets with a spoon

By now there's no use in pretending
Half-naked sweating in the street
Feels like the fun and games are ending
She says that I can't stand the heat

Feedback?

James]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jamestoffee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y9w8-summer/#post-361992 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y9w8-summer/#post-361976 Wed, 22 Dec 2010 15:04:33 +0000
I am also impressed that you put this out so fast. I like how summer is glad to show up but insulted when asked
to leave.

Ernie]]> Sunday Songwriters Group stikman https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y9w8-summer/#post-361976 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y9w8-summer/#post-361933 Mon, 20 Dec 2010 06:57:58 +0000
Thanks for the listen and post. What does NVM mean? My quick google search said "Nevermind"?
http://www.internetslang.com/NVM.asp
I had made a comment that I hadn't seen any post calling for summer songs. After I posted it, I saw that David had posted the Y9 W8 assignment but under the label of week 7. Then I changed my comment to "nevermind" kind of like Emily Litella.
I am truly impressed that you conceived, wrote and recorded your piece in last than 8 hours. Good tune.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group John Sargent https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y9w8-summer/#post-361933 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y9w8-summer/#post-361929 Mon, 20 Dec 2010 03:14:36 +0000
Thanks for the clarification. Kind of assumed as much but better to get it first hand. We can discuss this later when you get back.

And speaking of which, hope you have a good vacation. A Happy Christmas to you, your family and friends and please accept my best wishes for a wonderful New Year as well. Travel safely!

Peace]]> Sunday Songwriters Group David Hodge https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y9w8-summer/#post-361929 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y9w8-summer/#post-361928 Mon, 20 Dec 2010 03:08:06 +0000
Thanks for the listen and post. What does NVM mean? My quick google search said "Nevermind"?
http://www.internetslang.com/NVM.asp

Hi Dave,

Thanks for the critique :D
the discussion of "eternal" and "being mortal" aren't a bit out of place. As choices go, they seem to bring the song to a bit of a halt. Of course, that may be precisely the point. Yes, that was a bit of the point. Personification of Summer to a "god-like" status....and while human spirits are immortal the human body is mortal until the human spirits shed their "earth suits"......

......so the idea was summer awakens/stirs the eternal soul's feelings....feelings that we were meant for something big/more/purpose...eternal, but the body can't keep up with the spirit and goddess' "playtime". The body gets hot, tired and thirsty....etc.

Thanks for the musical suggestions as well. I'm off for holiday for a few days so I won't be able to get back to my equipment until the end of the week, but I did want to squeeze one out before I left.

James]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jamestoffee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y9w8-summer/#post-361928 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y9w8-summer/#post-361924 Sun, 19 Dec 2010 19:51:05 +0000
Definitely fun and a pleasure to listen to.

Can't help but wonder whether or not the discussion of "eternal" and "being mortal" aren't a bit out of place. As choices go, they seem to bring the song to a bit of a halt. Of course, that may be precisely the point.

But you could combine the second and third verses, like this:

We wake up some time in the morning
Maybe mid-day afternoon
Soak up her smiles until the stars come out
Eating sunsets with a spoon

When I confess I'm hot and thirsty
She curses me and then she pouts
A wind of change a chill is stirring
She slams the door on her way out

And then use your interlude and variations on the chorus and maybe even play a reprise of the first verse while the original chorus repeats itself. Just a thought.

Nice job as it stands, though! Like it a lot. And, as always, looking forward to more.

Peace]]> Sunday Songwriters Group David Hodge https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y9w8-summer/#post-361924 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y9w8-summer/#post-361922 Sun, 19 Dec 2010 19:11:28 +0000 Sunday Songwriters Group John Sargent https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y9w8-summer/#post-361922 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y9w8-summer/#post-40462 Sun, 19 Dec 2010 15:58:34 +0000
http://soundclick.com/share.cfm?id=10016355

==========Revised Version==========
Who's that knockin' at my front door?
Look it's Summer once again
I remember getting burned before
Still I smile and let her in

The moon is jealous by her visits
Summer laughs and doesn't care
Evening comes and we're still singing
Making music everywhere

It's summer time
The very best time of the year
It's summer time
Summer, summer time is here

We wake up some time in the morning
Maybe mid-day afternoon
The dreams we dream are worth exploring
Eating sunsets with a spoon

Though I'm trying not to notice
Beads of sweat form on my brow
Strip off my shirt and socks to look cool
How do you like me now?

It's summer time
The very best time of the year
It's summer time
Summer, summer time is here

It's summer time
The very best time of the year
It's summer time
Summer, summer time is here

By now there's no use in pretending
Half-naked sweating in the street
Feels like the fun and games are ending
She says that I can't stand the heat

When I confess I'm hot and thirsty
She curses me and then she pouts
A wind of change a chill is stirring
She slams the door on her way out

Interlude

When Summer leaves
Reality can be a bore
But I'll remember her
Like the Summers that came before

'Cause summer time
Is very best time of the year
Oh summer time
I'm waiting for you right here


==========Original Version==========
Who's that knockin' at my front door?
Look it's Summer once again
I remember getting burned before
Still I smile and let her in

The moon is jealous by her visits
Summer laughs and doesn't care
Evening comes and we're still singing
Making music everywhere

It's summer time
The very best time of the year
It's summer time
Summer, summer time is here

We wake up some time in the morning
Maybe mid-day afternoon
She makes me feel like I'm eternal
Eating sunsets with a spoon

Though I'm trying not to notice
Beads of sweat form on my brow
Strip off my shirt and socks to look cool
How do you like me now?

It's summer time
The very best time of the year
It's summer time
Summer, summer time is here

It's summer time
The very best time of the year
It's summer time
Summer, summer time is here

By now there's no use in pretending
Half-naked sweating in the street
She calls me mortal as an insult
Says that I can't stand the heat

When I confess I'm hot and thirsty
She curses me and then she pouts
A wind of change a chill is stirring
She slams the door on her way out

Interlude

When Summer leaves
Reality can be a bore
But I'll remember her
Like the Summers that came before

'Cause summer time
Is very best time of the year
Oh summer time
I'm waiting for you right here]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jamestoffee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/y9w8-summer/#post-40462