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This was a great topic to choose and I thought the original piece was great. However, the rewrites and editing have continued to make it better and better.

A fitting tribute to a very courageous person.

Excellent stuff

Bob :)]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Bob https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-3-wk-18-joanna/#post-93589 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-3-wk-18-joanna/#post-93216 Thu, 10 Mar 2005 21:58:08 +0000 Sunday Songwriters Group smokindog https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-3-wk-18-joanna/#post-93216 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-3-wk-18-joanna/#post-93215 Thu, 10 Mar 2005 21:48:52 +0000
firstly: I love the story, very interesting indeed. great thing to choose.

your revisions appear to be okay, but(sorry to stir this thing again) it seems like you leave something there that I thought was beautiful: Did you take time to sing one last sad melody
Joanna was that part of the plan the last line of this you kept but I thought it more beautiful with the 'sad melody' thing before it instead of the heroes thing.... that could just be me, of course.

otherwise I think it's a good song
take care
bluenightangel]]> Sunday Songwriters Group straycat. https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-3-wk-18-joanna/#post-93215 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-3-wk-18-joanna/#post-93203 Thu, 10 Mar 2005 20:09:04 +0000
I've only just caught up with this one - good stuff. Great topic too! Yeah, your reworkings have improved it.

Good work again!
G]]> Sunday Songwriters Group gjbrake https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-3-wk-18-joanna/#post-93203 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-3-wk-18-joanna/#post-93175 Thu, 10 Mar 2005 16:02:53 +0000
'And the men that you saved
Would they still think you brave' - how true.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Val https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-3-wk-18-joanna/#post-93175 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-3-wk-18-joanna/#post-92970 Wed, 09 Mar 2005 03:49:17 +0000
Thank You. I see what you mean about the second verse.

Thought this was going to be a fairly simple song. Boy was I mistaken.

Anyhow I ran with your suggestion ( with some onsite critiques from my lovely wife) came up with what may be the final edit.

It goes something like this:

Joanna, you were more than a lady
As the Major was more than a man
And the things that you showed
About all of our heroes
Joanna, was that part of a plan

Dhodge wrote: Then you could double the last verse like this (or something like this): If by double you mean leaving out the second chorus I think that would work very well.

Thanks again

Celt]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Celt https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-3-wk-18-joanna/#post-92970 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-3-wk-18-joanna/#post-92880 Tue, 08 Mar 2005 16:12:24 +0000
While I like this a lot, especially the chorus (as brothertupelo did), I'm wondering if you might make it a bit stronger by using more of a "point of view" or "he said/she said" approach. The first verse can stand as is but why not make the second verse only about the Major and his exploits? Then you could double the last verse like this (or something like this):

Joanna, you were more than a lady
As the Major was more than a man
And the things that we don't know
About all our heroes
Joanna, was that part of the plan

Joanna, were you buried with honor
It seems that would only be fair
But who would have wagered
you were also The Major
Joanna, you were quite the pair

By the bye, I love the "wagered/major" rhyme! Very cool! And it's also great that you got such an interesting topic to work with. Looking forward to more...

Peace]]> Sunday Songwriters Group David Hodge https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-3-wk-18-joanna/#post-92880 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-3-wk-18-joanna/#post-92862 Tue, 08 Mar 2005 10:32:26 +0000
I did rework the verses a bit.

Please let me know what you think.

Joanna

by John P Roche

Joanna, We heard of your secret
Joanna, you were not what you seemed
A hero and yet,
Was this life a regret
Joanna,what was it you dreamed

(chorus)
Were you living a lie
Was the truth deep inside
Or is the truth only what we believe
And the men that you saved
Would they still think you brave
For The Major and Joanna we grieve

Joanna, you were more than a lady
The Major he was more than a man
Did you take time to sing
A sad melody
Joanna,was that part of the plan

(chorus)

Joanna, were you buried with honor
It seems that would only be fair
But who would have wagered
you were also The Major
Joanna, you were quite the pair

(chorus)

R.I.P.

Celt]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Celt https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-3-wk-18-joanna/#post-92862 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-3-wk-18-joanna/#post-92859 Tue, 08 Mar 2005 09:45:48 +0000 Sunday Songwriters Group smokindog https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-3-wk-18-joanna/#post-92859 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-3-wk-18-joanna/#post-92818 Tue, 08 Mar 2005 02:37:37 +0000 Sunday Songwriters Group guitargeek https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-3-wk-18-joanna/#post-92818