https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-4-week-31-summers-here-it-seems/ Guitar Noise Discussion Board en-US Fri, 05 Jun 2026 09:24:30 +0000 wpForo 60 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-4-week-31-summers-here-it-seems/#post-182086 Wed, 07 Jun 2006 14:19:34 +0000
I like this song, flows really well, and has some nice lines.

The only thing I would change is the last two lines of this verse

Throw the kids
Out in the yard
You can't come in
Until it's dark
Make the most
Of the summer sun
It came from nowhere
Soon it'll be gone


Instead of

It came from nowhere
Soon It'll be gone

Which seems a little stretched to me, how about

You'll only miss it
When it's gone

Just my opinion, you obviously have a tune in your head, and no doubt the way you wrote it fits well.

All in all though, a great job mate.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Spadge https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-4-week-31-summers-here-it-seems/#post-182086 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-4-week-31-summers-here-it-seems/#post-181691 Mon, 05 Jun 2006 22:57:24 +0000 Sunday Songwriters Group Manitou https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-4-week-31-summers-here-it-seems/#post-181691 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-4-week-31-summers-here-it-seems/#post-181650 Mon, 05 Jun 2006 18:58:01 +0000
We have a saying here in "New"England

If you don't like the weather wait a minute.

I think you've caught that feeling well.

John]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Celt https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-4-week-31-summers-here-it-seems/#post-181650 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-4-week-31-summers-here-it-seems/#post-181642 Mon, 05 Jun 2006 17:58:28 +0000
In the first few drafts of this song, the last chorus was different to the rest, as I was trying to show that the summer had come and was gone again already, but I couldn't get it to work.

And you just did it in one line!

Nice :)

Pete]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Anonymous https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-4-week-31-summers-here-it-seems/#post-181642 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-4-week-31-summers-here-it-seems/#post-181614 Mon, 05 Jun 2006 14:53:20 +0000
Off with the jumpers
Off with the jeans
On with the bathing suits
Its summer, it seems
At least for this week...

Peace]]> Sunday Songwriters Group David Hodge https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-4-week-31-summers-here-it-seems/#post-181614 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-4-week-31-summers-here-it-seems/#post-181544 Mon, 05 Jun 2006 02:17:28 +0000
Laying in bed
Another dull day
What else can I do
But whittle it away?
A sudden burst
Of sunshine's flow
Comes crashing through
My lone window......


I like it! - but maybe "Laze it away" or "sleep it away" instead of "whittle it away".... maybe I'm just being too picky, trying to finish my own song off and struggling a bit - getting to the frustrated stage now.....grrrrrrrrrr!

:D :D :D

Vic]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Vic Lewis VL https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-4-week-31-summers-here-it-seems/#post-181544 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-4-week-31-summers-here-it-seems/#post-181538 Mon, 05 Jun 2006 01:58:03 +0000
The only problem I see with changing the lines to "And don't come in, until it's dark!" is that it takes the verse from 3rd person to 1st person, and the song is supposed to showcase how we feel about summer as a nation (i.e. applicable to anyone), not about an individual.....

I'll have a think....

Pete


Edit; Wrote another first verse, what do you think?

Laying in bed
Another dull day
What else can I do
But whittle it away?
A sudden burst
Of sunshine's flow
Comes crashing through
My lone window]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Anonymous https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-4-week-31-summers-here-it-seems/#post-181538 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-4-week-31-summers-here-it-seems/#post-181536 Mon, 05 Jun 2006 01:50:53 +0000
"Almost a panic
Gripping the nation
A spat of UV
Love that radiation!"

Love those lines, but I think frenzy might be a better word than panic.....

"Throw the kids
Out in the yard
You can't come in
Until it's dark"

Same with those lines, love 'em, but maybe "And don't come in, until it's dark!" - in inverted commas - might work there......

You definitely caught the spirit of the assignment, and the QUOTE fragility of the Great British Summertime UNQUOTE......I think you just need a few minor tweaks here and there, and you've got a really good, FUN, summer song!

:D :D :D

Vic]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Vic Lewis VL https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-4-week-31-summers-here-it-seems/#post-181536 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-4-week-31-summers-here-it-seems/#post-18213 Mon, 05 Jun 2006 01:17:05 +0000
Laying in bed
Another dull day
What else can I do
But laze it away?
A sudden burst
Of sunshine's flow
Comes crashing through
My lone window

Off with the jumpers
Off with the jeans
On with the bathing suits
Its summer, it seems

Almost a panic
Gripping the nation
A spat of UV
Love that radiation!
Beach-trip planning
In every street
Poolside parties
Friends meet ‘n' greet

Off with the jumpers
Off with the jeans
On with the bathing suits
Its summer, it seems

Throw the kids
Out in the yard
You can't come in
Until it's dark
Make the most
Of the summer sun
It came from nowhere
Soon it'll be gone

Off with the jumpers
Off with the jeans
On with the bathing suits
Its summer, it seems

Yes
Off with our jumpers
And off with our jeans
For our favourite season
Is here again, it seems

At least for today....]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Anonymous https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-4-week-31-summers-here-it-seems/#post-18213