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Thank You also to all of you asking about
my grandson Shaun.

We are happy to report that he is doing well
and sheduled to be released from Spaulding
Rehabilitation Hospital on Nov. 22

He is an amazing young man with a spirit
that will not quit.

John]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Celt https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-4-wk-1-the-game/#post-138520 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-4-wk-1-the-game/#post-138491 Sun, 13 Nov 2005 15:35:37 +0000
How's your grandson doing?

Joe]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Joe https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-4-wk-1-the-game/#post-138491 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-4-wk-1-the-game/#post-138397 Sat, 12 Nov 2005 07:55:20 +0000
But you've done it again, come up with another good one....at first read, looked like another song for Shaun, and hell, why not?

Reminds me of someone, not quite Dylan, possibly Arlo or Woody in reflective mood.....

Your writing has definitely taken on a different tone these last few weeks....we're all victims of circumstance, and it's probably the situation you were in a few weeks ago that's led to this new "darker" style.....although I'd think of it as more reflective, counting your blessings....

Keep 'em coming John....

:D :D :D

Vic]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Vic Lewis VL https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-4-wk-1-the-game/#post-138397 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-4-wk-1-the-game/#post-138261 Fri, 11 Nov 2005 20:04:52 +0000 I see this as me just speaking my mind. .

I think you might be right, and thats what makes it so powerful, great job

pbee]]> Sunday Songwriters Group pbee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-4-wk-1-the-game/#post-138261 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-4-wk-1-the-game/#post-138258 Fri, 11 Nov 2005 19:48:12 +0000 Sunday Songwriters Group teleplayer324 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-4-wk-1-the-game/#post-138258 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-4-wk-1-the-game/#post-138157 Fri, 11 Nov 2005 04:45:30 +0000
Pbee made a couple of comments that I find interesting.
This has something about it that is new for you I think, but I just cant put my finger on it. Whatever it is, I really like it. I think he is right and I'm sure not myself. My theory is that
when I write I tend to "hide" behind the characters created
for the song. This is true even in my more personal songs.

I see this as me just speaking my mind.

Which leads into the second comment
I would really have preferred the last verse to be unique and not a repeat of the first. I understand what he is saying saying but I tend to agree
with David this may just be one of those cases where less is
more. I think anything I tried would come out forced.

But you never know when The Muse will decide to mess
with your head and drop an idea in there.


John]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Celt https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-4-wk-1-the-game/#post-138157 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-4-wk-1-the-game/#post-138126 Fri, 11 Nov 2005 01:44:39 +0000 Sunday Songwriters Group Nils https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-4-wk-1-the-game/#post-138126 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-4-wk-1-the-game/#post-138124 Fri, 11 Nov 2005 01:40:09 +0000 And find the strength to endure. I only quoted this line because it seems so very true for me at the mo... The whole song is brilliant, not only this quoted part. Can't tell you exactly why but I know I like it :)]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Karla https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-4-wk-1-the-game/#post-138124 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-4-wk-1-the-game/#post-138009 Thu, 10 Nov 2005 20:59:01 +0000
The chorus is a thing of beauty! It's so simply put but it packs a ton of emotion. Depending on who and what the listener's imagination develops in terms of a "narrator," it can be earnest or a little wistful.

I understand PBee's wish for a different third verse, but I'm not sure it's necessary. Perhaps having a bridge instead of a third verse, followed by an instrumental verse and then a final chorus might be one way to go. For that matter, simply making the last verse instrumental is good if you want. I'm finding more and more that it's better to write less and be happy than to write a verse that you're not pleased with and that ultimately takes away from what you've built up.

Looking forward, as always, to more of your songs.

Peace]]> Sunday Songwriters Group David Hodge https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-4-wk-1-the-game/#post-138009 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-4-wk-1-the-game/#post-137921 Thu, 10 Nov 2005 12:14:10 +0000
Just adding in on the congrats club this is great well done ...

If I could offer anything in reponse to improve your song I would but I have nothing to say except this is

E X C E L L E N T

hilch]]> Sunday Songwriters Group BarnaBus RoX https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-4-wk-1-the-game/#post-137921