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Definitely one of your best here - good capture of the mood.

Just one very minor suggestion on top of everyone elses
Nothing but a glorified office clerk to

Just a glorified office clerk

Sits better with me and gives more impact.

Really good stuff

Bob :wink: ]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Bob https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-5-week-3-week-end/paged/2/#post-211103 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-5-week-3-week-end/paged/2/#post-210924 Sat, 25 Nov 2006 01:43:20 +0000
Just have to learn to play and sing now , so you can all have a listen ...


Thank you

Trevor....]]> Sunday Songwriters Group BarnaBus RoX https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-5-week-3-week-end/paged/2/#post-210924 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-5-week-3-week-end/paged/2/#post-210533 Wed, 22 Nov 2006 18:52:30 +0000

You really are improving Trevor. I'm with Vic.
This sounds very Springsteenesque to me.

Good Job

John]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Celt https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-5-week-3-week-end/paged/2/#post-210533 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-5-week-3-week-end/#post-210467 Wed, 22 Nov 2006 10:22:20 +0000
And thanks for the feed back ScratchMonkey ..Yeah I love that verse that you high lighted ...{ not saying my dreams are like that verse but it sounded pretty kool as I wrote it :lol: :lol: }

Trev....]]> Sunday Songwriters Group BarnaBus RoX https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-5-week-3-week-end/#post-210467 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-5-week-3-week-end/#post-210460 Wed, 22 Nov 2006 07:47:28 +0000 Nothing here for me to dread
Super models and super stars
Fast women and faster cars Dang man, whenever I remember my dreams, it's always about being drafted!

Overall, I think this was good. I had some problems with the chorus, it seemed a bit redundant, but the changes seem to work. I can't comment on how you've improved, since I only started back here myself a few weeks ago. But from the sounds of it, you're really coming along.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group scratchmonkey https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-5-week-3-week-end/#post-210460 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-5-week-3-week-end/#post-210444 Wed, 22 Nov 2006 05:58:40 +0000
As was said before, you're really starting to come through now with your writing, developing all aspects in the right direction.

Can't say I have any criticism about this at all, I loved it from start to finish, particulalry the little rant at the boss :D

Very nice job

Pete]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Embrace_the_Darkness https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-5-week-3-week-end/#post-210444 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-5-week-3-week-end/#post-210282 Tue, 21 Nov 2006 09:31:04 +0000 Soft downy pillow for my head
I am off into the land of nod
Where I am treated like a god

Erotica, Fantasies fill my head
Nothing here for me to dread
Super models and super stars
Fast women and faster cars

Oh no what is that sound
I jump up and spin around
Buzzing screaming in my head
Alarm clock I wish you were dead

Week-end Week-end how
I wish it was the week-end now
Week-end week-end how
I wish it was the week-end now

Shower coffee morning rush
A quick wipe with the shaving brush
Fighting with the early traffic jams
Kids screaming about their exams


At work boss man is such a jerk
Nothing but a glorified office clerk
God I know I know I'm late again
I'm wishing it was the week-end


Week-end week-end how
I wish it was the week-end now
Week-end week-end how
I wish it was the week-end now]]> Sunday Songwriters Group BarnaBus RoX https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-5-week-3-week-end/#post-210282 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-5-week-3-week-end/#post-210265 Tue, 21 Nov 2006 07:08:42 +0000
:lol: :lol: :lol: :lol: :lol:]]> Sunday Songwriters Group BarnaBus RoX https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-5-week-3-week-end/#post-210265 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-5-week-3-week-end/#post-210263 Tue, 21 Nov 2006 06:50:38 +0000
:D :D :D

Vic]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Vic Lewis VL https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-5-week-3-week-end/#post-210263 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-5-week-3-week-end/#post-210262 Tue, 21 Nov 2006 06:35:49 +0000
I did spell check with word before posting it ... These must be the American spelling of these words ...{ looking for excuses here peolpe}

Yeah up beat Springsteen mmm yeah ok I'll go with that ...

I was thinking more of Johnny Cougar

John Cougar

John Cougar Melloncamp

Or what ever it is now

And you have probs with me changing my name :lol: :lol: :lol: :lol: :lol: :lol: :lol: :lol: :lol:


Thaks mate


Trev...]]> Sunday Songwriters Group BarnaBus RoX https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-5-week-3-week-end/#post-210262