https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-9-week-40-finding-my-way-explicit-mp3/ Guitar Noise Discussion Board en-US Thu, 04 Jun 2026 16:27:50 +0000 wpForo 60 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-9-week-40-finding-my-way-explicit-mp3/#post-368434 Fri, 05 Aug 2011 15:46:07 +0000
I've had a chance to listen now. I really like the music. Nice job on the playing and singing 8)

Suggestion: Consider getting a "hook" in the song; preferably one with the title. As it is now, it doesn't seem to have found a direction... I think you have a lot of possibilities, but need to choose one direction to head into. With the contrasting self-description of the character, it reminds me of Meredith Brooks' song
http://www.lyrics007.com/Meredith%20Brooks%20Lyrics/Bitch%20Lyrics.html
....and that's a good thing :wink:

Also, there seems to be a conflict in the lyrics where the title is saying "finding my way". For me, this indicates somewhat of a search or quest, but then the word you hold out the longest "maintain" seems to imply staying put or keeping the status quo...not a forward movement or quest.

So in all, musically I like it a lot and lyrically it's a good start but could use a bit of focus on a message or idea.

Thanks for sharing :D

James]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jamestoffee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-9-week-40-finding-my-way-explicit-mp3/#post-368434 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-9-week-40-finding-my-way-explicit-mp3/#post-368426 Fri, 05 Aug 2011 08:02:43 +0000
Thanks for the listen and the encouraging comments.

Yea Vic id like to be able to put a little solo into i've only sarted using audacity since i joined the SSG tho so im pretty basic at the moment. Anyone got any info on how to add another layer to a song? that would be really appreciated.

James im not sure what the problem was, i just tried to listen to it there and there were no problems so maybe soundclick was just messed up for a little while.

cheers,

Ben]]> Sunday Songwriters Group br85 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-9-week-40-finding-my-way-explicit-mp3/#post-368426 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-9-week-40-finding-my-way-explicit-mp3/#post-368397 Thu, 04 Aug 2011 16:46:57 +0000
I tried to hear the song, but I got a message of a loading error. I see Vic and Peter were able to hear it, so I don't know if the problem is on my end or if you changed the upload :(

I've been too busy to work on anything yet this week, but I see you headed the same route I was planning by using the verb "to be" as a list "I am".....or "love is".....etc....

I'll wait to see if others are able to hear the song.....I'd like to :wink:

James]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jamestoffee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-9-week-40-finding-my-way-explicit-mp3/#post-368397 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-9-week-40-finding-my-way-explicit-mp3/#post-368356 Wed, 03 Aug 2011 05:27:30 +0000
Seems to me, though, it's crying out for a solo between the two verses and the conclusion....I'd love to let Slash loose there and say "let 'er rip!" even though the song feels a little more Nirvana influenced than heavy rock.

Definitely a.....

:D :D :D :D :D

Vic]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Vic Lewis VL https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-9-week-40-finding-my-way-explicit-mp3/#post-368356 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-9-week-40-finding-my-way-explicit-mp3/#post-41616 Tue, 02 Aug 2011 10:23:29 +0000
MP3: http://www.soundclick.com/player/single_player.cfm?songid=10910795&q=hi&newref=1

I'm a lover, I'm a writer, I'm a buzzer, I'm a fighter, I'm a thief
I'm an a**hole, I'm a friend, I'll compliment and offend, speak my belief
I am it all underneath

I'm a voice, I'm an ear, I'm a shoulder for your tears, I'm your fan
I'm a reader I'm a student I'm a teacher I'm a mutant I'm a man
But to tell you truth I don't who I am

I'm struggling finding my way
Do you feel the same?
I wonder if I may
Help you carry your pain?
Even just for today
Together we can maintain
Maintain]]> Sunday Songwriters Group br85 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-9-week-40-finding-my-way-explicit-mp3/#post-41616