https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-9-wk-22-all-that-i-got/ Guitar Noise Discussion Board en-US Fri, 05 Jun 2026 09:42:01 +0000 wpForo 60 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-9-wk-22-all-that-i-got/#post-365309 Tue, 05 Apr 2011 16:45:12 +0000 Sunday Songwriters Group wilhelmina https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-9-wk-22-all-that-i-got/#post-365309 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-9-wk-22-all-that-i-got/#post-365201 Sat, 02 Apr 2011 05:37:27 +0000 Sunday Songwriters Group martin-6 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-9-wk-22-all-that-i-got/#post-365201 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-9-wk-22-all-that-i-got/#post-365184 Fri, 01 Apr 2011 11:13:18 +0000
It's looking good :D Nice song concept.

Some bits and pieces trip me up on the read, but maybe your delivery makes the lines work. For example:
But if you stay by me But if you stay with me
I'll give you all that I got I'll give you all I've got


I like "All I Got" better than "All That I Got"
...but again if I heard it, I might not even make these suggestions as they seem minor until I hear the delivery.

Thanks for sharing.

James]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jamestoffee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-9-wk-22-all-that-i-got/#post-365184 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-9-wk-22-all-that-i-got/#post-365179 Fri, 01 Apr 2011 06:27:43 +0000
About the only thing that didn't quite fly for me was... Wait, let's rephrase that, it flew but not quite as well as the rest of it... was the line "But if you stay by me". It sound like she might be about to push off, which I don't think was the intention.

Maybe it's just me, but it felt like you started with "stand by me" and changed it for the obvious reason that's it's such a well known song line already. But I guess that "if you come with me", "if you're lovin' me", "if you consent to engage in a meaningful life partnership arrangement with me" etc, aren't really much of an improvement though. :?

I wasn't entirely sure about offering her the blue sky either, as she already has access to that. And phrasing it "sky of blue" rather than 'blue sky' sounded slightly odd - a bit Yellow Submarine... But this is a song not a legal document, so the meaning is pretty clear. Yes, I guess it was it was a fairly sharp twist on the brief, but it's still a good song and I can imagine audiences liking it.

Chris]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Chris C https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-9-wk-22-all-that-i-got/#post-365179 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-9-wk-22-all-that-i-got/#post-41049 Fri, 01 Apr 2011 03:29:33 +0000

All That I Got

I ain't no doctor
With some big fancy car
I ain't no NFL superstar
My account's in the red
More often than not
But if you stay by me
I'll give you all that I got

I ain't a no lawyer
Don't wear no suit and tie
I'm more of a jeans and t-shirt guy
I'm telling you Baby
I ain't got a lot
But if you stay by me
I'll give you all that I got

(ALL THAT I GOT)

I got a love that's true

(ALL THAT I GOT)

Got tender kisses too

(ALL THAT I GOT)

I got the sky of blue

(ALL THAT I GOT)

I'll give it all to you.

And though I ain't got squat
I'll give you all that I got

I ain't no genius
But I sure ain't no fool
Ain't got no kingdom
I don't follow the rules
And as I've told you before
I ain't got a lot
But if you stay by me
I'll give you all that I got

:note1: :note1: :note1:

John]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Celt https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/year-9-wk-22-all-that-i-got/#post-41049