https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/yr-3-week9-will-i-ever-be-enough/ Guitar Noise Discussion Board en-US Thu, 04 Jun 2026 19:39:08 +0000 wpForo 60 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/yr-3-week9-will-i-ever-be-enough/#post-84046 Sun, 09 Jan 2005 04:45:55 +0000
scratch.. I do agree that it is a little on the complex side, as I was writing it just seemed to flow that way! There were a lot of lines I thought could stand by themselves, and they just ended up arranging themselves in a sort of pattern as I wrote, so I just went with it till the end. and thanks for your other comments, i appreciate it. :)

XXXX you would be neither wrong or right in saying it is written for two people. It is currently arranged for one, but in reading your comment I realised there are lots of places where harmony and echo could be placed or added- gave me an idea for a new arrangement!

thanks again for your replies.

Jacqui]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Jacqui1627 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/yr-3-week9-will-i-ever-be-enough/#post-84046 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/yr-3-week9-will-i-ever-be-enough/#post-83909 Sat, 08 Jan 2005 16:27:29 +0000
am I right in saying this ?]]> Sunday Songwriters Group XXXX https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/yr-3-week9-will-i-ever-be-enough/#post-83909 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/yr-3-week9-will-i-ever-be-enough/#post-83888 Sat, 08 Jan 2005 09:54:04 +0000
I read this earlier in the week, and was quite impressed. But I haven't had a chance to comment on anything before this evening.

Anyways, I had a tough time figuring out your structure on this one. It looks sorta complex. For instance, you have a chorus, immediately followed by a section marked (C2). Then you have those two-line sections right after a verse. And the bridge towards the end. You may be able to pull this off real well, I wouldn't know. I'm only saying it was complex. There are a lot of complex songs though, that work real well.

There's a lot, though, about this song that I really like. The first verse is just beautiful. "Constructed eternity" and "superficial time", wonderful phrases.

and "I want to be the tiny raindrop, who starts a raging flood" -- terrific lines. And then, your bridge is absolutely wonderful. Really enjoyed reading this.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group scratchmonkey https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/yr-3-week9-will-i-ever-be-enough/#post-83888 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/yr-3-week9-will-i-ever-be-enough/#post-6113 Wed, 05 Jan 2005 06:04:46 +0000 i'm lost in constructed eternity
trapped in a current of superficial time
I want to run with the fastest rivers
and soar with the ones who chose to fly

Why can't you see, your road is far from mine
but yet I would do anything, to be something more in your eyes

Chorus
I wish I could cross the raging ocean
just to know I'd make you proud
I wish I could stand upon the highest peak
my hand reaching through the clouds
(C2)you said I'd make you proud one day
would you still love me
if I went my own way?

I want to be the tiny raindrop
who starts a raging flood
I want to love those who've forgotten
their place is true with mine

Free from the cage my heart belongs
to ignite the flame, chase away the night
where can I find the strength
to reach for the fading light?

Why can't you see, your road is far from mine
but yet I would do anything, to be something more in your eyes

Chorus
I wish I could cross the raging ocean
just to know I'd make you proud
I wish I could stand upon the highest peak
my hand reaching through the clouds
(C2)you said I'd make you proud one day
would you still love me
if I went my own way?

Short instrumental

I will run with the fastest rivers
I will love those who lost their time
I will be the smallest raindrop
I will soar with those who fly
I will find the strength
I will reach for the light..
my question is this, to the world I ask..
will it be enough?

Instrumental

I wish I could cross the raging ocean
just to know I'd make you proud
I wish I could stand upon the highest peak
my hand reaching through the clouds

you said I'd make you proud one day
would you still love me
if I went my own way?




Well this is my first SSG in a long time... the 'you' in this song is a more general way of refering to the world, and the 'I' persona is trying to battle against the worlds expectations, and wishing that simply being true to who you are could be enough.

please let me know what you think, any changes you think should be made etc.. but if not thanks for reading, hope you enjoyed :)

Jacqui]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Jacqui1627 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/yr-3-week9-will-i-ever-be-enough/#post-6113