https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/yr-7-week-26-were-only-halfway/ Guitar Noise Discussion Board en-US Fri, 05 Jun 2026 10:58:54 +0000 wpForo 60 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/yr-7-week-26-were-only-halfway/#post-328099 Thu, 07 May 2009 10:02:38 +0000
Just echoing what has already been said ,

Nice piece of writing and most definitely worth working on]]> Sunday Songwriters Group BarnaBus RoX https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/yr-7-week-26-were-only-halfway/#post-328099 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/yr-7-week-26-were-only-halfway/#post-327468 Tue, 28 Apr 2009 01:30:06 +0000
Not much to add there is lots of good advice already.

This does seem like one that is worth putting the effort into though.


:note1: :note1: :note1:

John]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Celt https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/yr-7-week-26-were-only-halfway/#post-327468 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/yr-7-week-26-were-only-halfway/#post-327427 Mon, 27 Apr 2009 16:50:54 +0000
I get what you mean there though, and what you said james, maybe it is just a story of their lives.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jaythejoker https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/yr-7-week-26-were-only-halfway/#post-327427 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/yr-7-week-26-were-only-halfway/#post-327424 Mon, 27 Apr 2009 16:27:31 +0000
Good start :D You seem to be pretty strong at developing details. Each verse I was intrigued and wanting more.

Suggestion:
Consider piecing a story together even if it is not directly told in the song. Then go back over the verses and take out what doesn't fit the story line or add in what's missing.

James]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jamestoffee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/yr-7-week-26-were-only-halfway/#post-327424 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/yr-7-week-26-were-only-halfway/#post-327418 Mon, 27 Apr 2009 08:59:28 +0000
I was thinking the train ride was more like a metaphor for their lives together . . .
They're going to "ride that train" . . . of matrimony? . . . who knows? . . .
maybe the train will get derailed . . . maybe the next stop is Divorce Junction . . .

KR2]]> Sunday Songwriters Group KR2 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/yr-7-week-26-were-only-halfway/#post-327418 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/yr-7-week-26-were-only-halfway/#post-327412 Mon, 27 Apr 2009 04:45:49 +0000
I think you're definitely right about the first one, makes a bit more sense.

To explain the second, I was saying how the main characters were going to nowhere and the random people were leaving nowhere, I think it got too confusing at that point though.

Perhaps

To run to wherever they belong


Jay]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jaythejoker https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/yr-7-week-26-were-only-halfway/#post-327412 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/yr-7-week-26-were-only-halfway/#post-327384 Sun, 26 Apr 2009 17:39:54 +0000 Sunday Songwriters Group KR2 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/yr-7-week-26-were-only-halfway/#post-327384 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/yr-7-week-26-were-only-halfway/#post-35814 Sun, 26 Apr 2009 16:48:54 +0000 Perhaps a little too enthusiastically, ending up with this which is possibly too long. Oh well, I think I lost the plot (in both ways :lol: ) in the middle somewhere, and when Nowhere became a place well then it all fell apart, so any advice would be nice :D


A new day begins again
With the clipping of the trees
No clouds stood in the way
You lay there resting beside me

Our dreams were swept away
In the light of day
The blaze of light so strong
Broke us from our quiet sleep

We're only halfway now
Halfway awake, together once more
We're only halfway now
The light of day, caressing our souls

Our gaze drifted over the tracks
Sinking deeply into the dark
The tunnel lit brightly by the oncoming train
It came and hissed to a stop

The whistle rang out loudly
As we leaped quickly on board
With our bags pulled behind us
Our trip to nowhere began

We're only halfway now
Oh we're alone on the train
We're only halfway now
Halfway to a place we don't know

The train lurched to a stop
We scuttled off in the oncoming rush
The people shoved to get on
To run from the nowhere they belong

We stepped out into the cold
From the platform of the trains
The rain splattered down from above
And we cowered alone, once again

We're only halfway now
Oh we're walking alone
We're only halfway now
Halfway to Nowhere's centre

We're only halfway now
Halfway to the quiet and the cold
We're only halfway now
Halfway to a place to call our own]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jaythejoker https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/yr-7-week-26-were-only-halfway/#post-35814