https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/yr-7-week-34-tom-and-jerry/ Guitar Noise Discussion Board en-US Fri, 05 Jun 2026 08:51:29 +0000 wpForo 60 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/yr-7-week-34-tom-and-jerry/#post-332516 Sun, 28 Jun 2009 05:29:17 +0000
Nice idea about the hook, pretty easy to change
As for the depth I'll have to think about that, I definitely like the idea of showing Jerry in control

Heh, classic moments would probably be a good addition. Personalizing it is an interesting idea...

Lots to think about :P]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jaythejoker https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/yr-7-week-34-tom-and-jerry/#post-332516 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/yr-7-week-34-tom-and-jerry/#post-332503 Sun, 28 Jun 2009 00:52:56 +0000
James raises a few good points - doesn't he always! - as to how you could develop this. I'd add to that by saying, maybe you could add a little more detail? Throw in some of the classic moments - a cat with a frying-pan-shaped face, a cat-shaped hole in the roof, Jerry being chased by Tom who's being chased in turn by Spike.....

Or maybe personalise it a little more? Turn the whole song into a metaphor about a love/hate cat-and-mouse relationship; maybe turn the cat into a "Cat on a hot tin roof" and the mouse a mousey personality....

Just a few ideas, anyway; I'll be interested to see what you do with this, and to see if you can develop it further. There's already paint on the canvas, the background's filled in; all it needs is a few fine brush strokes, some fine detail, and you're going to have a really good song here.

:D :D :D

Vic]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Vic Lewis VL https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/yr-7-week-34-tom-and-jerry/#post-332503 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/yr-7-week-34-tom-and-jerry/#post-332477 Sat, 27 Jun 2009 17:39:15 +0000
Good start. :D You have 3 episodes laid out...none seemingly dependent on the other and your clear hook.

Suggestion:
#1
Since it seems obvious that the answer to the question "Is it that time again for a game of cat and mouse?" is "Yes" how about phrase the hook as a statement....it's that time again for a game of cat and mouse.

#2
Personal preference, but there doesn't seem much depth or purpose to the narration...this could be fine for you and for most listeners, but I tend to prefer working the ideas a bit or listening to songs with some depth.....I like the idea of cat and mouse....

possible ideas to build on:

...who did you identify more with while watching....Tom or Jerry?

....you could question why are we so fascinated with the chase?....or the idea that the chase is really more important than the catch...it gives Tom a purpose for his life...like one idea in life, the end goal is not as important as the process or journey

....or the idea that Jerry really wants or needs to be chased....he really isn't at peace unless he is being bothered by Tom

....or the idea that even when they are friends there is always tension because a cat is a cat and a mouse is a mouse...no getting around what we are

.....or maybe Jerry as a mastermind in control He is always so clever to get away, I am sure he could have easily come up with a way to kill off Tom whenever he wanted....normally cat and mouse game the cat is in control, but this would be a twist...where the real controller is the mouse.....

Just some thoughts.

It will be interesting to here how the chords you choose will flavor the song and determine the genre.

James]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jamestoffee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/yr-7-week-34-tom-and-jerry/#post-332477 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/yr-7-week-34-tom-and-jerry/#post-36429 Sat, 27 Jun 2009 16:08:55 +0000
Run to that hole in the wall
You got a few more steps
He's gonna catch you.

He's running, he's right on your tail
But he trips and he falls
That's how this episode goes

And you've got
And you've got just one question

Is it that time again?
Is it that time again?
Is it that time again for a game of cat and mouse?

He's holding a chunky baseball bat
And he goes swinging
It round the kitchen table

Watch your head now
He's aiming for it.
You duck, and you hide
He hits himself instead

Is it that time again?
Is it that time again?
Is it that time again for a game of cat and mouse?

He's waiting, he's sharpening his claws
With a butcher's knife,
The silver gleaming

And as you look in the reflection
A getaway plan
Comes into your head

Is it that time again?
Is it that time again?
Is it that time again for a game of cat and mouse?

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Only singing at the moment, haven't had time to add chords]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jaythejoker https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/yr-7-week-34-tom-and-jerry/#post-36429