https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/yr-7-wk-33-happy-song/ Guitar Noise Discussion Board en-US Fri, 05 Jun 2026 09:26:34 +0000 wpForo 60 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/yr-7-wk-33-happy-song/#post-332260 Thu, 25 Jun 2009 04:21:01 +0000 Sunday Songwriters Group jaythejoker https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/yr-7-wk-33-happy-song/#post-332260 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/yr-7-wk-33-happy-song/#post-332101 Mon, 22 Jun 2009 16:56:12 +0000 Lyrics for 'Reminding me of you' included on soundclick now Hey Jay,

The lyrics gravitate towards a poetic feel which seems to work with the song title.....Are you sure this isn't a seen from Gossip Girl? :roll: :lol:...just kidding...still haven't watched any and don't plan to :wink:

Suggestion:
Try to run a movie director's perspective as you go through the song. It seems like the title "Reminding me of you" is something that would be a thought as to someone from the person's past or said in a letter or over the phone...but the first verses, the singer is asking the singee to go for a walk......to do what?.....reminisce of the past?.....or remember mutual friends that died?

"And those that we have lost they gather
On the waters edge, mingling in the waves
They sing to me"

I sense you might have an idea worked out. Consider dropping a couple more dots for the listener to connect :wink:

James]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jamestoffee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/yr-7-wk-33-happy-song/#post-332101 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/yr-7-wk-33-happy-song/#post-331991 Sun, 21 Jun 2009 00:37:12 +0000
Jay, good effort - it's a little less specific than I was looking for, but like I've said before, there are no hard-and-fast rules - just guidelines. You've captured the film noir atmosphere I was looking for nicely, and that's the main thing. Look forward to reading more from you!

:D :D :D

Vic]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Vic Lewis VL https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/yr-7-wk-33-happy-song/#post-331991 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/yr-7-wk-33-happy-song/#post-331528 Mon, 15 Jun 2009 14:33:03 +0000 By the way my opinion of you has sunk after you posted a link to gossip girl :lol: Painful show that one. That's ok...if it helps, I've never watched the show....that was just a link I came across when I was googling about the phone conversation assignment.....I am kind of "off" tv as it says in the Bible "no one can serve two masters" so I am serving the songwriting gods for now...I am sure the tv gods are not happy but what's one less worshiper :twisted: ....except for a brief drop in to satisfy the family movie time....which they are calling me in to watch "Stardust" right now....I hope it's kid friendly.

I'll have to check the other lyrics later... :wink:

James]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jamestoffee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/yr-7-wk-33-happy-song/#post-331528 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/yr-7-wk-33-happy-song/#post-331525 Mon, 15 Jun 2009 13:45:21 +0000 Yep, that's exactly why I used that phrasing for that kinda delayed emphasis. By the way my opinion of you has sunk after you posted a link to gossip girl :lol: Painful show that one.

P.s.
Lyrics for 'Reminding me of you' included on soundclick now]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jaythejoker https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/yr-7-wk-33-happy-song/#post-331525 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/yr-7-wk-33-happy-song/#post-331523 Mon, 15 Jun 2009 12:46:49 +0000 I wrote outside of these competitions :roll: assignments, Jay ASSIGNMENTS :!: :wink: :lol:

Good start. :D I can't tell if I like the line "you suck up all my air"...but it is memorable so I'd leave it in for now...

Ok. I can't figure out the movie, but I am not too surprised as I have limited exposure to this genre....is it "Kill Bill"?

Suggestion: Might just bring you down
To me
One idea I head about phrasing is that melodic phrases and spoken phrases should mirror each other. Unless you are using it for an effect like this line "I never should have let you....let me go" from Gossip Girl
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_lADswYM8ps

Here is a great video online about phrasing worth checking out:
http://www.berkleemusic.com/welcome/pattison_clinic‏

James

PS
I listened to "Reminding me of you"....sounds like a good start as well. Consider posting the lyrics on your soundclick page for more critique but no need if you were just posting it to share.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jamestoffee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/yr-7-wk-33-happy-song/#post-331523 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/yr-7-wk-33-happy-song/#post-36307 Sun, 14 Jun 2009 15:15:08 +0000 Kinda aiming this one at the 'femme fatale' character (the deadly woman)
After listening to it I realised that (James I think) had a chorus about his song not being happy :shock: oops, they're not very similar though, recording included, though it's a bit meh... my voice isn't too great when I'm tired

Happy song

A bullet with my name
Shoots from your fingertips again,
(Again)

And all that you say
I cannot comprehend,
Anything, now

Sing me a happy song
Cause what I'm singing
Might just bring you down
To me

You never asked me how
To get out of this place
Alive, (alive)

And now that you're here
you suck up all my air
And leave, (and leave)

Sing me a happy song
Cause what I'm singing
Might just bring you down
To me

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/default.cfm?bandID=941315

It's "Happy song" on that link, the top song "Reminding me of you" is something I wrote outside of these competitions, so feel free to listen to that too :D]]> Sunday Songwriters Group jaythejoker https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/yr-7-wk-33-happy-song/#post-36307