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cheers!!

NeM]]> Sunday Songwriters Group +LostBeggining+ https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/yr3-wk7-catch-the-dream/#post-81039 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/yr3-wk7-catch-the-dream/#post-80849 Tue, 21 Dec 2004 22:36:21 +0000 Sunday Songwriters Group guitargeek https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/yr3-wk7-catch-the-dream/#post-80849 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/yr3-wk7-catch-the-dream/#post-80807 Tue, 21 Dec 2004 19:13:46 +0000
Yes it is dark indeed.

Seems to me there may be more to this story and another verse might round it out a bit.

It also seemed a bit wordy to me and I did a quick edit. Hope you don't mind.

I think if you were to change the title line a bit from a statement, where I can catch the dream, to a question, where can I catch the dream? it would have a little more impact. I also liked the change gjbrake suggested.

Any ways that's my take on it.

Here's my edit do with it what you will.

Catch The Dream

V
Sleep with the light on if I wake in the dark
I whisper lines of truth will I get them back
I dont remember asking for just another day
But i when i close my eye I'll be here again

C
I dont know if I know anything
We live in dreams we fall to everything
I cant wait to see the way this will be
It seems I'm running to nothing, where can I catch the dream ?

V
I Picture you in your favourite dress
The strands of your hair make me catch my breath
I never thought I'd be bleeding on your floor
Crying my eyes out in my hearts little war


Celt]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Celt https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/yr3-wk7-catch-the-dream/#post-80807 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/yr3-wk7-catch-the-dream/#post-80800 Tue, 21 Dec 2004 18:31:46 +0000
im guessing you used the half-rhymes to widen your choices of words?

for me, the half-rhyme works in some places and quite arguable in some others.

one thing i'd say thought is i like the mood of the song. brooding.. reflective (at least for me) and a tad bit dark.]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Mave Datthews https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/yr3-wk7-catch-the-dream/#post-80800 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/yr3-wk7-catch-the-dream/#post-80765 Tue, 21 Dec 2004 14:54:32 +0000
I wasn't expecting it, but this is quite a dark piece of work, isn't it? Or it is the way I'm getting it, at least. It seems im running to no where I was thinking maybe change this to 'it seems I'm running into nothing' (or something like that) - as then you have loads of rhyme in your chorus:

I dont know if i know anything
We live in dreams and all the time we fall to everything
I cant wait to see the way this will be
It seems im running into nothing, where i can catch the dream

It's only half rhymes in places, but I noticed the rhyme with the first 'dreams' so it's just a thought.

Good stuff though. It needs a couple reads to get into it, but that's no bad thing.
Keep it up!
G]]> Sunday Songwriters Group gjbrake https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/yr3-wk7-catch-the-dream/#post-80765 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/yr3-wk7-catch-the-dream/#post-5693 Mon, 20 Dec 2004 02:42:37 +0000
V
Sleep with the light on so id wake up in the dark
I would whisper lines of truth if i thought i get them back
I dont remember asking for just another day
But i know when i close my eye ill be here again

C
I dont know if i know anything
We live in dreams and all the time we fall to everything
I cant wait to see the way this will be
It seems im running to no where, where i can catch the dream

V
I Picture you in your favourite black dress
The strands of your fair hair catching my breath
I never knew that id be bleeding on your floor
Crying my eyes out in my hearts little war]]> Sunday Songwriters Group +LostBeggining+ https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/yr3-wk7-catch-the-dream/#post-5693