https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/yr6week38/ Guitar Noise Discussion Board en-US Thu, 04 Jun 2026 14:08:16 +0000 wpForo 60 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/yr6week38/#post-303224 Mon, 04 Aug 2008 04:42:34 +0000 I liked the suggestion. I think I'm gonna use

sat at the counter
next to this girl
who in my eyes

looked so cute
her voice so sweet
my what a delight]]> Sunday Songwriters Group maddog https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/yr6week38/#post-303224 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/yr6week38/#post-302195 Sun, 27 Jul 2008 23:05:21 +0000 welcome to SSG. I think this has all the ingredients of a good song well done. I was thinking about those lines that you were having trouble over and maybe something like this:
Sat at the counter
Next to this girl
Who in my eyes

Looked so cute
with a voice so sweet
My what a delight looking forward to more

cheers
Paul]]> Sunday Songwriters Group pbee https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/yr6week38/#post-302195 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/yr6week38/#post-302184 Sun, 27 Jul 2008 21:27:11 +0000
Welcome to SSG

The truth is Vic pretty much covered my thoughts but I want to welcome you anyways.

John]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Celt https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/yr6week38/#post-302184 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/yr6week38/#post-302126 Sun, 27 Jul 2008 06:14:33 +0000
Vic


Hi again Vic

I do have it put to music
but it's real simple as I'm not very accomplished guitar player it's basically

A
the trip was long
B
and before I had even got there
B___________D_____________A
I was________already tired


that's for the verses
an the chorus goes

D
time and time ad time again
A
you meet someone your life starts to spin
D
sinning, spinning out of control
B_________________D______A
where it's headed no one knows
B_________________D______A
where it's headed no one knows

anyway thats what I done and I had a lot of fun working on it and I never would have wrote it without this forum.
Thanks for any feedback
Malcolm]]> Sunday Songwriters Group maddog https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/yr6week38/#post-302126 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/yr6week38/#post-302124 Sun, 27 Jul 2008 05:55:59 +0000 thanks for the feeback.

your right there is supposed to be another word on that line

it should go

the trip was long
and before I had even got there
I was already tired

i'm thinking of changing the word trip to flight because of the taxi line in the next verse

also on the other line

who in my eyes

actually I was thinking that it led into the next verse of her having the sweetest voice
I guess it should read

who to my ears

but that didn't feel right to me but after looking at it and playing it,it might be ok actually I think I kind of like it, but I can't make it work with My what a delight on the next verse. I could change that verse too, but for some reason I really like that verse.

If you get a chance tell me what you think. I really appreciate it.
thanks
Malcolm]]> Sunday Songwriters Group maddog https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/yr6week38/#post-302124 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/yr6week38/#post-302109 Sun, 27 Jul 2008 01:37:33 +0000
I've had a quick read through - working on something myself, so, selfishly, I'm only thinking of my own song.

A couple of places, though, it looked as though you had an idea and didn't carry it through.....

"The trip was long
And before I had even got
I was already tired"

Looks to me like it needs another word after "got" - maybe half-way, or something along those lines.....got what? got where?

Similarly, there's another line here that looks unfinished;

"Sat at the counter
Next to this girl
Who in my eyes

When she said hello
A voice so sweet
My what a delight"

Who did WHAT in your eyes? looked in your eyes? spat in your eyes? got lost in your eyes? It just seems like an unfinished line......

Hey, they're only a couple of minor quibbles - rest of the song looks fine. And that's why you posted the lyrics, to get feedback on them, yes? Well - as always, just my opinion. I think you've got maybe 90% of a good song - those two little points are, IMO, all that need fixing.

Got any ideas for music?

Good to see a new face in here, hope you'll stick around for a while!

:D :D :D

Vic]]> Sunday Songwriters Group Vic Lewis VL https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/yr6week38/#post-302109 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/yr6week38/#post-301950 Fri, 25 Jul 2008 20:01:51 +0000 Sunday Songwriters Group maddog https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/yr6week38/#post-301950 https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/yr6week38/#post-32760 Fri, 25 Jul 2008 19:59:39 +0000 This is the first time I've ever wrote something and put it in public, but when I saw the SSG it sounded like a lot of fun and I thought I would try my hand at this.The song itself may not meet the complete criteria set forth in the listing, but it was totally inspired by the ideal of being on vacation and meeting some locals and this is what came of it.



The Way That It Goes


The trip was long
And before I had even got
I was already tired

By the time
I found a taxi
I had already walked for miles

Got to the hotel
Up to the room
Collapsed on the bed

I was hoping
This time would be perfect
But I wound up here instead

Woke the next morning
The sky was storming
What a start to a brand new day

The rain was pouring
And me with no cover
I ran for the café

Sat at the counter
Next to this girl
Who in my eyes

When she said hello
A voice so sweet
My what a delight

I shook off the rain
And I asked her
If she lived around here

She told me yes
And in her eyes
It was all so clear

She touched her fingers
To her lips
Then she touched my hand

And ever since
That faithful day
I've come to understand


CHORUS


Time and time and time again
You meet someone your life starts to spin
Spinning, spinning out of control
Where it's headed no one knows
Where it's headed no one knows


Now time has come
And time has gone
I'll never forget that day

The day this girl
Made me feel like a king
And my troubles seemed to slip away

I wish I could go
Back there again
But I don't know really where I was at

I can't tell
Even if it was real
Or if I ever really did that

CHORUS


Time and time and time again
You meet someone your life starts to spin
Spinning, spinning out of control
Where it's headed no one knows

Where it's headed no one knows
Well I guess that's just the way that it goes]]> Sunday Songwriters Group maddog https://guitarnoise.forum/sunday-songwriters-group/yr6week38/#post-32760