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Topic starter
05/07/2005 10:26 pm
hello people,
just a song about change..when people run away because they dont feel 'right' how/where they are in life...i understand where im coming from its kinda hard to explain what i mean..maybe you will understand when you read it....comment,criticise...whatever tickles your pickle..
thanks....gaz :D
closed eyes..
v1
you cant fight what you've become
i know it hurts...
maybe pack your bags and run?
and become a failure..
v2
follow your heart try something new
i know its hard..
maybe your heart wont tell the truth
a test of trust..
v3
will you know when you get there?
its called fate
and do you know if your prepared?
for whats ahead..
chorus
change yourself for you and only you...
dont let anyone tell you otherwise..
tell me the truth...are you alright?
dont hide behind your closed eyes..
"people laugh at me because im different...i pity you..because your all the same"
06/07/2005 6:34 pm
hey, this song is pretty good so far i wish i could hear it to see how its sung so i can get a picture of it, because without hearing it the ABAB rhyme scheme sounds funky to me. But maybe its just because i can't hear how you sing it.
13/07/2005 6:38 pm
Looking good so far Gaz....tried it out a couple of different ways (slow and moody ballad, fairly up-tempo rocker) and it work either way....
Be interesting to see the finished version, and your thoughts on music for it....
:D :D :D
Vic
"Sometimes the beauty of music can help us all find strength to deal with all the curves life can throw us." (D. Hodge.)
14/07/2005 8:59 am
Hey there
I have to agree with Vic when he said " Looking good so far "
I'm intrigued how you will bring this piece to a end , just sitting here I thought maybe a twist at the end ? like maybe 4 TH verse / outro like this person is standing behind you ?? (big twist ) Just a thought , but what you have is very nice . :wink:
cheers
L.K :arrow:
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Topic starter
14/07/2005 8:33 pm
thanks all im kinda stuck with it at the moment im goin through a dry patch of writing,im off work you see and all my songs come from going to the toilet at work for a very long time :D :D (for writing purposes!) so im gonna finish it as soon as i get back on track (monday when i get back to work)...lol
thanks for the replies i'll post it up when im done
thanks again....gaz :)
"people laugh at me because im different...i pity you..because your all the same"
26/07/2005 11:02 pm
its AWESOME!!! maybe some rhyming would be good. i think it could be called Behind Closed Eyes
