"Whirlwind Of Time"...

Ok...Wrote 1st verse n chorus of this bout a month ago but left it....finished it off yesterday...Any help or comments etc will be appreciated......its quite long and that but..... :? ...here it is....

Whirlind Of Time

Well I was living all of, my crazy burning dreams
Thrown out all my worrys through my more than bitter screams
And I could sit here all day long, and think myself out this mess
Or catch up on my daily drag through the things that I do best
She said “boy you don't come from round here, its written all over your face”
“You shouldn't step through these waters when you seem so out of place”
So I looked back then to the skys and I preyed that she was wrong
If im a stranger to such a familiar world, then where do I belong

It all leads to no where
And its wearing me down
Draining all my life
We are going no where
And were just spinning around
In this whirlwind of time

Now I was not afraid to admit of who I am
One step further backwards on this road to be a man
And I knew I could make it if I just found my heart
Instead of all this pretending to be something im not
I said “Girl you know I try my best, but I just cant shake off this pain”
”I Guess that you should tell me the rules, before I play your game”
So as she vanished I looked down and realized she'd gone
Now I know that I must find myself before I can ever belong

It all leads to no where
And its wearing me down
Draining all my life
We are going no where
And were just spinning around
In this whirlwind of time

It all leads to no where
And its wearing me down
Draining all my life
We are going no where
And were just spinning around
In this whirlwind of time