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07/03/2004 12:56 pm
This was at the bottom of last week's assignment and I thought I'd put it here for Mike so it doesn't get lost.
<--- This isn't Mike by the way this is still me! Welcome to the SSG Mike - glad you stopped by.
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This is my first post here so I hope I don't blow it. Â
The song I wrote is only a first draft so please, be gentle. Â Or not. Â Whatever.
(Misspellings are intentional.)
A woman in a two piece suit
Straight out of Arabian Nights
Naive and sweet she'll give you anything
even if it ain't right.
Your wish, not her command
any other woman would take a stand
they'd slap you upside the head
and say they're goin' back to bed. Â
You wish. Â
You won't have nobody to call you master
even though they might lead you into disaster.
Livin' in a bottle won't be her lot
but you might find yourself in that spot.
You wish all your dreams'd come true
with that little blonde lady with her eyes so blue.
But if you ain't happy with the one you got
You better think about that ring you bought.
'Cause Your wish ain't her command
any other woman would take a stand
they'd slap you upside the head
and say they're goin' back to bed. Â
You wish.
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All in the name of fun! Â
You are what you eat, eat well
08/03/2004 5:00 am
Thanks, Bob! :o
"Da*n your bolt-brained bearings!" Rod Gallowglass to his faithful, epileptic robot, Fess.
"As you wander through life, wherever you go, keep your eye on the donut and not on the hole." -- Paul Osteen (brother of Joel Osteen)
08/03/2004 7:37 am
Ohhhh NOW I get it!. Sorry MikeO, I read this last week, and for the life of me I couldn't figure out who this was supposed to be. Brain lag, sorry.
Anyways, this is a fun song, and you did a good job with it. The only part I think you could tighten up a bit is,
[But if you ain't happy with the one you got
You better think about that ring you bought.]
There's nothing really wrong with it, but it just sounds a little bit forced.
I used to watch I dream of Jeannie all the time, I can't believe I missed it. :P
-- Scratch
10/03/2004 6:46 am
Sweet! I'm glad I'm not the only one who got it. I'm not sure if I'll do anything else with it. I'll have to keep aneye on the forcing. Thanks! :D
"Da*n your bolt-brained bearings!" Rod Gallowglass to his faithful, epileptic robot, Fess.
"As you wander through life, wherever you go, keep your eye on the donut and not on the hole." -- Paul Osteen (brother of Joel Osteen)