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09/11/2003 6:54 am
(I can't seem to get the chord markers to align with the word at which they change...it's pretty intuitive, though, I think)
Tumbleweed
D Â Â Â Â Â Â Â Â Â A Â Â Â Â Â Â Â Â Â Â Â Em
I drifted into town the other day
D Â Â Â Â Â Â Â Â Â Â Â Â Â Â Â Â Â A Â Â Â Â Â Â Â Â Â Â Â Â G
Thought I could find a place to rest my feet
D Â Â Â Â Â Â Â Â Â Â Â Â A Â Â Â Â Â G Â
Stopped by the local saloon
D Â Â Â Â Â Â Â Â Â Â Â Â A Â Â Â Â Â Â Â Â Â Â Â Â G
To maybe get a drink or a bite to eat
D Â Â Â Â C
Tumbleweed
G Â Â Â Â Â Â Â Â Â Â Â Â Â D
Push me in some direction
D Â Â Â Â C
Tumbleweed
G Â Â Â Â Â Â Â Â Â Â D
Drifting on the wind
D Â Â Â Â C
I don't need
G Â Â Â Â Â Â Â Â Â Â Â Â D
A permanent connection
D Â Â Â C
I just want
G Â Â Â Â Â Â Â Â Â Â Â D
Somewhere to fit in
I sat down at a table in the back
Ready to order a glass or two of beer
The waiter came swaggering through the swinging door
And told me, "we don't serve no tumbleweeds here"
Tumbleweed
Push me in some direction
Tumbleweed
Drifting on the wind
I don't need
A permanent connection
I just want
Somewhere to fit in
So now I'm on the dusty road again
Rolling down to somewhere I belong
I know eventually I will get there
But sometimes the journey seems so long
Tumbleweed
Push me in some direction
Tumbleweed
Drifting on the wind
I don't need
A permanent connection
I just want
Somewhere to fit in
Somewhere to fit in
Somewhere to fit in
(c) Alpaca_Turned_Blue 2003
09/11/2003 10:44 pm
Hi Alpaca and welcome,
Good writing.
Oddly enough I really like all of it except the first verse.
The first verse seems to describe a thought process while the rest seem to describe action. Try changing that first one into actions.
Nice chorus, any thoughts of recording this?
Nick
10/11/2003 7:01 pm
I agree with a lot of what Nick says and would like to make the following suggestion -
Since the chorus is really great and the second verse is a lot stronger than the first, why not go for a different structure? Start with the chorus! Check it out:
Tumbleweed
Push me in some direction
Tumbleweed
Drifting on the wind
I don't need
A permanent connection
I just want
Somewhere to fit in
I sat down at a table in the back
Ready to order a glass or two of beer
The waiter came swaggering through the swinging door
And told me, "we don't serve no tumbleweeds here"
Tumbleweed
Push me in some direction
Tumbleweed
Drifting on the wind
I don't need
A permanent connection
I just want
Somewhere to fit in
So now I'm on the dusty road again
Rolling down to somewhere I belong
I know eventually I will get there
But sometimes the journey seems so long
Tumbleweed
Push me in some direction
Tumbleweed
Drifting on the wind
I don't need
A permanent connection
I just want
Somewhere to fit in
Somewhere to fit in
Somewhere to fit in
Throw in a brief instrumental between the second chorus and the last verse and I think it'll be great.
More!
Peace
12/11/2003 2:17 pm
All's said that needs saying. Nothing to add.
A :-)
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