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24/03/2004 6:23 am
Yet again...the title has gotta go..suggestions? comments? Thank you!
"My Love"
V1
From the moment I met you
I knew you were the one to see through
You starred right past my eyes
And glimpsed at me deep inside
CHORUS
Images of you
My love, my love
Smiling at me
My love, my love
The beauty of us
My love, my love
Will never be
My love, my love
V2
The way you sit and listen to me
It makes me feel so interesting
I wanna crawl inside your mind
And see what good things I can find
CHORUS
V3
I feel a deep connection here
You whisper softly in my ear
Your voice just makes me melt inside
Let's find a place where we can hide
CHORUS
V4
My smile soon fades away
Old patterns come out to play
You'll never know what hit you
Can't explain why I do what I do
CHORUS
V5
You have control of my heart
And I must play this one smart
So here is my cold shoulder
Our burning love I will smolder
CHORUS
24/03/2004 8:27 am
umm.. the chorus had better be the greatest pop melody in the world cuz you sing it 5 times. maybe you could combine 2 verses and make it not so predictable. after the 3 time a chorus is played i start to think.. did i really need to hear it a 3rd time? and maybe the answer is yes.. but a 4th or 5th time??? surely not.
stop listening to me
25/03/2004 8:08 am
Hey Stagefrghtsux,
I agree with Homeboy. The chorus is a bit overdone. Everything else is fine. The structure is good, it's consistent throughout, and the chorus itself is good. But even filet mignon can become tiresome if you get too much of it. Well.... so I'm told.
-- Scratch