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06/04/2004 10:45 pm
This is a pretty simple pop-ish song, with a mellow verse and shout-it-out chorus. I don't know, but I don't think I said quite enough in it,as it's kinda short, but I figured someone out there would have suggestions.
Someday (tenative title)
I'm all alone
With no one to hear me
I feel my thoughts come near me
And they seem to say
Someday I will
Someday I will
Someday I will
Have you near me
Someday I will
Someday I will
Someday I will
Make you mine
Some other time
I see the stars
They shine above me
Someone must love me
Like I loved you
Someday I will
Someday I will
Someday I will
Have you near me
Someday I will
Someday I will
Someday I will
Make you mine
Some other time
And now the wind
Stirs the leaves around me
Now you have found me
I'm not alone any more
Your memory
Seems to linger 'round me
Now peace has found me
So I'll be lonely no more
Someday I will
Someday I will
Someday I will
Have you near me
Someday I will
Someday I will
Someday I will
Make you mine
And this is the time
Yeah, this is the time
09/04/2004 5:02 pm
Hi Uke
Not a bad song and I don't think it says too little - let's face it we're talking pop here not rocket science. Â I think the problem is in this verse:
And now the wind
Stirs the leaves around me
Now you have found me
I'm not alone any more
At this point you're trying to round off the story and the first two lines don't add anything to the song at all. Â I'd rethink this verse but especially those two lines.
Otherwise good stuff - I heard the chorus with loud drums and a percussive style of guitar (if that makes any sense).
Bob  :)
You are what you eat, eat well
09/04/2004 11:33 pm
O.K. so I changed that last verse a bit on the fly, still I think it sounds a little clearer than before.
I totally agree with the idea of the crashing drums & screaming guitar type of thing in the choruses, that's always what I think of when I play it.
10/04/2004 8:13 am
I don't know, but I don't think I said quite enough in it
Someday you will. ;)
-- Scratch.