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11/11/2003 9:02 pm
Okay, here goes....
May-bee and the redneck
May-bee's father, drunk on spiced rum,
staggered home, the dirty little bum
lost his way, oh what the heck
found himself in the yard of the crazy redneck
standing there, swaying all around
he saw the marijuana stacked up by the pound
eyes wide and with a mischievous grin
he took one for himself and one for his kin
turning to leave, but not a moment too soon
there was the redneck holding his rifle and a new spit-toon
"you can only take my dope", the redneck had said
"if you send one of your daughters to stay with me instead"
the old man made it home and sent May-bee away
to the crazy redneck's new double wide trailer to stay
May-bee cooked and cleaned and did all she could
and the redneck took to liking her really, really good
one night after she made him her famous apple pie
he asked her to marry him, else he would certainly die
"not as a wife I will stay, but as a friend" she said
"but please let me return home so I can get my bed"
"for a day you may leave, but for no longer," he said
so she hurried back home but fell asleep instead
the next day she rushed back to find him passed out cold
so she promised to marry him, though she was 14 years old
after that day he changed from a crazy redneck to a dad
when May-bee gave birth to their firstborn named chad
and they lived happily ever after in this messed up scene
while she became known as his double wide trailer queen
12/11/2003 4:12 pm
The funniest story I have read in a long time.
Well done. Olav
12/11/2003 5:48 pm
Marvellous.
Some of the line lengths are struggling but there's certainly some potential there.
A :-)
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13/11/2003 2:18 pm
What a great take on Beauty and the Beast! ;)
What sort of music do you have in mind for this? Knowing that would help get a better handle on how the lines will read.
You're off to an impressive start, sir!
Peace
13/11/2003 2:38 pm
and the redneck took to liking her really, really good
Excellent line - just oozes menace.
Echo Alan's comments on the line length in places.
Excellent stuff
Are you going to record and post it, cos it would be great to hear it.
Good Stuff
Bob ;)
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14/11/2003 1:43 am
Uhh...I don't know what kind of music to put to it. Â And I certainly don't know how to record it if I did (I am still struggling with getting 'horse with no name' down). Â Thank you all for the compliments though! Â :D