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05/01/2004 2:52 am
--------- Why Don't You Stay The Night ---------
Saying please don't go
In this fading day's light.
I can't imagine me without you.
Why don't you stay the night.
Saying please don't go
When this seems so right,
to feel your warmth surround me.
Why don't you stay the night.
-------- Starting Last ----------
Starting last,
I'll get there when I do.
In my marathon,
of forever chasing you.
Let all the others
get there first,
and when their
time is through.
I'll get there for
the happy end
of me with you.
Starting last.
05/01/2004 4:04 pm
Pretty good stuff - I really like the starting last submission - it works well for me.
Bob ;)
You are what you eat, eat well
05/01/2004 7:56 pm
Starting Last - very clever.
05/01/2004 11:11 pm
Why don't you stay the night is very very good, like it a lot
Go well
Jamir ;)
I am a cloud within a cloud http://www.justjamir.com
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Topic starter
06/01/2004 5:01 am
Thanks. I wasn't sure that the
"Starting Last" would work without having the
rhythm I had in mind indicated.
06/01/2004 5:04 am
I like it :). Starting last has a sad note to it...or is it just me? ;)
-Laura
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06/01/2004 5:55 am
No it's not about you. Â :)
07/01/2004 7:41 pm
Starting last is good, very comforting.
I like the first 'Why don't you stay the night' best, because the 'I' is giving a pathetic reason - the day's light is fading.