Year 4 Week 40 - Walking away from You

Hi everyone. Here's my effort for the week.

Technically it's not "A break from writing new stuff" as it IS a new song, but one that I've been messing with, adding to, taking away from, and singing at work for the last 5 days or so :D

Up to this point I have tended to sit down when I get a chance to and write a song, then post it here and see what you all say, then tweak it a little depending on the responses. I decided it was high time I become my own critic and tried to improve upon a song over a period of time. Ah, anyway now I'm rambling :P

Here's the song, it's a pop-rock-punky kind of song (thats the music I have in my head for it anyway).
The verse are going to be rythmic plam muted powerchords, with the bridge slowing emerging from plam muting into strumming, into the chorus full strumming.

Walking away from You

Verse 1

Lying here
Drowning in my own tears
I can see that there's
Nothing left to give

You've taken all
Away from me
Made me a slave
To your company

Bridge

But I won't give
Give into you
Now I can see
See that we are through

Chorus

So don't come around (don't come around)
Try and stand your ground
‘Cos you'll just fall
Down
(down) And this is sound
(This is the sound)
Of me just walking away
Walking away from you

Verse 2

Dying here
Choking on my own fears
When I know that there's
Nothing left in me

You've taken all
That I can give
Controlled my life
Only half-lived

Bridge

Chorus

Outro-chorus

So don't come around (no don't come around)
If you stand your ground
You'll just fall
Down
(down) And that was sound
(That was the sound)
Of me just walking away
Walking away from
Walking away
Walking away from
You…………

Thoughts, comments, question etc. all welcomed as always.

Pete